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aGhostInThisShell — Remembering
Published: 2003-09-24 09:29:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 152; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 58
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If I have ever felt anything, I feel love for you now.My body strains, my back arches, my being ebbs and flows with the changing tides of your love.
You pull me like the moon pulls on the tides,
on a sea of love, my vessel of life capsizes
in the raging torrent of humanity and carelessness of our love.
I feel you, I taste you, I hear you, I am you.
My love only grows deeper, like the roots of a Cyprus tree, never ceasing to dig to new depths in my soul.
I would like you to help me explore the innermost recesses of my lonely, womanly, loving heart.
Are you man enough?
Comments: 1
too much like prose, not really poetry
you just spaced it out to look like poetry
poetry is not about concealing a piece of prose to look like a poem
a poem consists of poetic techniques, that you find draws the reader in
this is too long and tedious to read as a poem
more like prose - thoughts
but i suppose poetry gains more attention
lataz
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