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AlwAys-tRy — Pessimist
Published: 2009-01-02 16:06:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 1371; Favourites: 21; Downloads: 9
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Description She says
  'Look at the stars, don't they look pretty tonight?
       Each one's  like an angel up in heaven,
                                         guiding the lost home.'

        I say
           'I don't believe in heaven.'

                                                              The silence afterwards
                                                                                was deafening.         

Because I didn't think the stars looked pretty,
                           I thought they looked dull, almost gray.
             Almost like a dirty tear drop, rolling down the face of those angels
                           after they realised, they could never guide me home.

                
              
              'Hey the glass of vodka still looks pretty full,
                        we can share it together. And then afterwards,
                                               we can go somewhere quiet.'
                                                           She said oh so seductively
                   I say
                     'I'd rather just stay here.'

                                                             Suddenly she lost that seductive look.

Because I thought the glass looked pretty empty
                    but I guess that's still ok, because alcohol helps
                to forget the torn up memories and hopeless emotions.

      
     She says
         'Hey let's watch The Notebook. I love romantic movies.
               They make me cry alot though, but it'll be ok.
                  Because I'll lay in your arms and I'll feel so safe and happy,
                because I know you love me too.'
                                                     
                             I say
                          'Haven't we already seen The Notebook?'

                                                          At that moment it almost looked like
                                                                        her heart had broken in two.
                                                   
Because I never liked romantic movies,
                   I fell asleep the last time we went and saw one.
                 And if they make you cry why watch them?
                     Why don't you cry about something actually sad?

            
                        She says
                         'I'm sorry but I don't think we should
                                                  be together anymore.
                                                                    It'd be less painful that way.
                     We will always be friends, and we can always
                                        be there for each other but,
                                   I think we'd be happier if we
                                            lived our own seperate lives.'
                                        

                           I say
                              'Happiness is pretty hard to find.'

                                                                               So she walked away
                                                                                    and never looked
                                                                                                            back.
     
           And now without her everything is just so
                                                                      
                            empty...
                                                                           
                                           meaningless...
                    
But I guess for once I thought she was right.
                It will be less painful if we're not together.
                       Because now I think that, she'd miss me less
                                
                             After the angels fly me
                                                 away tonight.
                                                                  
                                  
    
                              
                   
                          
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Comments: 72

PunkMusicRox In reply to ??? [2009-01-03 07:52:50 +0000 UTC]

YW!!!!!!!!!!

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HugQueen [2009-01-02 23:49:33 +0000 UTC]

Touching. So very touiching. I normally don't like formatting like this but it amplifies everything here. Great job dear.

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to HugQueen [2009-01-03 13:01:51 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!! I'm glad you thought so

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HugQueen In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-03 14:18:28 +0000 UTC]

It's my pleasure dear! <3

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to HugQueen [2009-01-03 14:20:27 +0000 UTC]

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HugQueen In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-03 14:31:39 +0000 UTC]

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underworldriver In reply to ??? [2009-01-02 21:43:21 +0000 UTC]

the arrangement captures the story and the emotional depth well. The story was definitely sad but easy to relate too. I'm sure we all can say that we didn't know what we had until it has left us.

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to underworldriver [2009-01-03 13:36:06 +0000 UTC]

Cheers. I'm glad I the arrangement worked out. And yeah you're right, I never thought of it having that message.

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underworldriver In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-03 21:59:52 +0000 UTC]

oh it was the main message that came to mind. You are welcome

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residentevilfreak553 In reply to ??? [2009-01-02 17:19:05 +0000 UTC]

Aww, buddy...that was so sad! But really good though!! I have two questions that are..uh..kinda personal though 1) are you okay? (I know it might be stupid to ask, but I'm always concerned about something and I just wanted to make sure) 2) you don't believe in heaven? (it's fine with me if you don't...I was just wondering)

But anyways, really good poem and I really like the way it was laid out

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to residentevilfreak553 [2009-01-03 13:43:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!!!
Oh it's not a stupid question, I understand. Yeah I'm fine. I appreciate it though, it's nice to know you care.
And I'm undecided on whether there is a heaven, I just believe whatever makes me happiest.
Though this poem isn't actually about me, it isn't written through my eyes. I just wrote it in first person perspective because I thought it would make for a more interesting piece that way.

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residentevilfreak553 In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-07 05:28:48 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, for asking, I mean! and I do care because that's what friends do! Again, sorry for asking such a touchy religious question! I was just curious! But, I feel the same way right now (even though I'm supposedly Christian-don't tell my parents or school-they'd freak!) But, geez! I'm pretty dumb, especially to call myself a fellow poet! I should have been able to tell it wasn't about you! You're a better poet than me! I hardly know anything about poetry...

And sorry it took so long for me to reply! Please forgive my laziness!

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to residentevilfreak553 [2009-01-07 15:16:46 +0000 UTC]

It's all good, you don't have to apologize! I'm happy to answer anything religious based about myself. Yeah same, my family is all Catholic and I've been baptized and confirmed and whatever so I should firmly believe in heaven. But....
Nah you're not dumb, it's a pretty logical thing to ask. Oh and I'm not better than you, your poetry is awesome, and if you didn't know anything about poetry how can you write it so well??
And your laziness is forgiven!!
Which is funny cuz I'm even lazier

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residentevilfreak553 In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-14 12:42:57 +0000 UTC]

Yeah...I know what you mean. Right now, I don't really believe in anything(including myself Haha) And thanks for saying my poetry is awesome I don't know how, but I just started writing and just continued it. I'm terrible at disecting poems and figuring out unstress/stress stuff; meter I'm horrible at too! I really don't know how, but I just started writing and didn't stop

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to residentevilfreak553 [2009-01-16 09:59:46 +0000 UTC]

But you should believe in yourself!!!! And it's no worries, your poetry is honestly awesome though.
The way your going with writing is good, that's the best way because then you're constantly improving and exploring different techniques and such.
And you're not horrible and dissecting poems, even if you think you are!!

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residentevilfreak553 In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-01-29 02:43:33 +0000 UTC]

you are super amazing, you know that? Your comments are always uplifting, even when I'm in the worst of moods! thank you so much for the support! It's comments like these that keep my hopes and dreams up!Thank you again!

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to residentevilfreak553 [2009-01-31 09:39:19 +0000 UTC]

haha i wish. but thanks anyways! Awww I'm glad that I can support you in some way!
No worries!

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residentevilfreak553 In reply to AlwAys-tRy [2009-03-05 10:09:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to residentevilfreak553 [2009-03-06 14:55:02 +0000 UTC]

No worries!

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peterdawes In reply to ??? [2009-01-02 16:21:14 +0000 UTC]

this is an amazing poem. both with the arrangement of words and the use. very nice work!

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AlwAys-tRy In reply to peterdawes [2009-01-03 13:36:50 +0000 UTC]

Cheers mate!!!

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