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awesomesauce — condemned by assumtion
Published: 2004-09-03 01:11:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 109; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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what question worth askingwhat answer worth giving
what asks of this answer
what gift doth recieve
reception deserves
'pon giving's worthy answer
does questioning recieve
deserving nothing more
than this decievingly blatant lie
yea, growing weary this earth doth lye
toward this growth of lieing death
aware of its assumtions, concerned by our questions
uttered forth by withered breath
unworthy of your answer
giving worth to your silence
not held by your gaze
but by my questions deserving not
what power you ask?
tis love, but none other
so they assume
as this riddle does solve
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o man i love it..... u are now my new friend 
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may you're brake pedals be eaten by acidic snails
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o wow... i love the language... very brilliantly written
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u r so awesome, amazing, u have no clue, why why why?!?!?!?!
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I think that if you are going to write a poem in an older phrasing pattern (they way people used to speak in the old days) that you should do it through out the poem... I don't know exactly what you're trying to accomplish with this particular piece of writing.. I like it... it is very well written.. I just think if you're going to use "old english" as I've heard it referred to as, you should do it throughout the whole written piece..
i.e.: unworthy of thy answer
giving worth to thy silence
not held by thy gaze
but by thine questions deserving not
Like I said.. not exactly sure on what you're going for.. but I got the older English vibe from this written piece....
...just trying to be helpful.. if I've offended you please let me know
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