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Published: 2005-03-08 19:07:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 145; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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wish i was never herewhere cieling has become floor
backwards to forewards
battling gravity
the hall covered by parallel walls
trying to find the words to fill these lines
my absence means more than present
if i become what you throw at me
satisfaction is in the eye of the beholder
it would seem i would be perforated by desire
not mattering weither i guide my pen
they write themselves without telling my hand
the end is inside these walls
no less dense than the space you take up
two times were you warned
my world upside down
wish i was never here
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perfectcontradiction [2005-03-09 00:48:37 +0000 UTC]
extended metaphor? ish?
im not too fond of the "my life is upside down" dark pit of darkness cliche, but you managed to incorporate it from a different angle... so you escape rhetorical punishment by the skin of your teeth this time around.
ha.
skin of your teeth.
im so cliche.
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hobbitfreak [2005-03-08 20:47:31 +0000 UTC]
Excellent. I feel the exact same way right about now.
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