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awesomesauce — the bliss on the radio
Published: 2004-09-02 22:51:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 151; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 5
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Description and you,
     with your fancy glances
                  childlike dances
                stealing glances
              making advances
             in deep dark glasses
     twirling along with your white gloves on
                  singing candle songs
                 laying on the lawn
                watching each other yawn
               feel like ive won

this date is more than
the time i spent thinking
  of all the sudden movements
   and dangeresque expression
    syncronymous to our steps

this time, this moment
                is better than the bliss on the radio
       or cadence of the sad show
            why dont we both live there?

when my head stops spinning
                 ill see you,
                                 still moving
        moving to the song in my head

my eyes
      they follow your hips
             in optic spleandour
             like spring in december
             only the times i remember
bracing this pillow
                          like it wants a fight
         tempting me slowly
           softer and softer
            dampening
                        sound
                     ...
             and it stops
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Comments: 9

MikeLovesEveYah [2004-10-06 12:43:00 +0000 UTC]

beautiful

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wondrwomn [2004-09-04 07:02:50 +0000 UTC]

you rock!

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brandi-dawn-777 [2004-09-03 14:50:28 +0000 UTC]

omwow! i love it!!!

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lipsxeyesxback [2004-09-03 03:57:57 +0000 UTC]

Gah! Your so good, it hurts!
I'm very happy to hear a happy poem.
Who is this wonderful girl you write about? She is very lucky....

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lovelorn [2004-09-03 03:12:46 +0000 UTC]

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I have none.

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avalokiteshavara [2004-09-03 02:44:05 +0000 UTC]

hmm..
really plug in my atmosphere


__stockpile beautiful moments
write them down, keep a photo, keep a record in your computer.
Then recall these moments often, reflecting on them,
taking pleasure in them, integrating them into your day - to- day routine and outlook.

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girlwithabrokenheart [2004-09-03 00:35:07 +0000 UTC]

ooo!
wow!

its really good!! its happy, I like it!

(hehe just fix the lil typos)

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Srfgurl5 [2004-09-03 00:08:44 +0000 UTC]

OMGOODNESS I was 2 distracted by u when you read it to realize how awesome this is MISS U!

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longhairhippie [2004-09-02 23:09:40 +0000 UTC]

got shivers.

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