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BCRich40 β Improving skills - Part 5
Published: 2012-04-27 15:46:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 37329; Favourites: 258; Downloads: 197
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The Fifth part of my first pony comic.I think my English is poor, so I apologize in advance. Feel free to point out errors.
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Yeah, cider that bubbles a lot on top is usually alcoholic, unless it has other impurities in it to make it frothy. In this case, yes, very alcoholic, and being a person from up north, I have drank my fair share of cider but don't recall getting THAT wasted. Dash must be a light-weight drinker.
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unless its soft cider which isn't alcoholic and hard cider is kind which since i perfer non-alcoholic i go with soft cider
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kk and i read all the parts and its really awesome!!
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XD you rejected me?
twilight-facebook. XD I LOVE THIS
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That's just not fair!!! How can she do that to Dash???
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Also, your English is actually pretty good. Better then some who speak it naturally!!
I'm guessing it's not your native language?
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You're right, it's not my native language. I have improved my English skills a lot since I started this comic series, and thanks for that goes to people who helped me to fix all grammar mistakes.
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Panel 1: Twi should say "Before or after the dance?" Panel 2: Twi should say "First, you started to say nice things about me"
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Awww, poor Dash got rejected. DonΒ΄t worry, Dashie, youΒ΄ll get her next time when sheΒ΄s drunk. <3
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Super Mega Ultra Incredibly Lame English Correction!
Actually, there's not much to correct!
3rd panel: Twilight1: "Then you came a bit too close to me, so I gently pushed you further and rejected you."
Your error is the second section. If you use the word "further" you must indicated a direction. She could have even pushed her closer to herself!
If I were you, I would replace "further" with "away" so that the direction is known, and if you're pushed away, it's the same as being pushed further away.
ironically, you could just place "away" after "further" and it would be correct as well. Also, comma after away.
Also, this isn't a error, because it's correct, but you could take out "to me" because we assume if you don't state an object, the object is itself.
This is what I would put for Twilight's speech:
"Then you came a bit too close, so I pushed you away, and rejected you."
You're doing great. Keep at it!
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This is for all of your correction-comments because I'm too lazy to type something similar for each one of them.
Thank you for feedback! I really appreciate it! I have always been bad to speak/write English and this must be the first time ever, when I'm actually trying to communicate with foreigners. However, I'm not going to upload fixed versions of these comics (although, I fixed those errors). After all, the series is called "Improving skills". So those errors are like a part of it, if you know what I mean.
But thank you so much again! I learned a great deal today!
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Not a problem at all. I'm honoured to have played a part in your skill-improving activities.
I'm in Australia, so I'm pretty much a foreigner anyway - DeviantArt is hosted in America.
If you want to increase your English ability, I recommend reading. A lot. Any reading you can do will help.
And what better to read than stories about ponies? You can read fan-fictions about My Little Pony on
[link] . A lovely site, I read a good deal of fictions.
I wish you the best of luck, and look forward to your artwork.
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Dude, movies (TV generally) is 80% of my learning the other 20% is google; when i fell that there is a mistake.
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I take my words back. I uploaded fixed versions of my comics, and I'm going to do so in the future.
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