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blameXmyself — Darkness and Shadows
Published: 2008-03-02 07:03:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 56; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Turn off the lights and turn off realityDarkness hides sins to the point of perfection
Turn off your conscience, beleive what I say
Discard who you are and I'll lead the way
'Cause here we can exist as shadows and forms
Honesty doesn't hold any truth now
So show me the way out the door, down the alley
So show me the way that you want this to be
Right now I'd do anything to see you happy
Right now I need this to make you need me
Mesmerized by promises no one'd believe
Just for tonight I'm your one and your only
Mesmerized by your eyes, consistently cold
There's never I time when you don't have control
'Cause here we can exist as shadows and forms
Honesty doesn't hold any truth now
So show me the way out the door, down the alley
So show me the way that you want this to be
Right now I'd do anything to see you happy
Right now I need this to make you need
'Cause here we can exist as shadows and forms
Honesty doesn't hold any truth now
Right now I'd do anything to see you happy
Right now I need this to make you need me
Need this to make you need me
Need me
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Comments: 1
'allo. ho.k. so. the first believe you spelled wrong. but i know that's just a typo 'cause you're brilliant. and in the second verse i'm assuming you meant "a" where you said "I."
i think the second verse is pretty good, actually. there're some things i could suggest, but that would screw up the rhythm with the whole 11 syllables thing. i don't know if the second line is working for me...it doesn't really go with the first line. maybe say something like "you said i'll always be your one and only" 'cause it's like a promise no one would believe...? possibly? see, this is why i suck at songs. i always want to throw extra stuff in that's off-beat, like an extra line with just two words.
maybe for the chorus part instead of "honesty doesn't hold any truth now" you could try "honesty doesn't hold truth anymore" 'cause i think the idea of honesty holding truth at one point but not now comes across more with "anymore."
so for the end, what if you tried "desperate for you to need me" for the third line? it would change stuff up a bit cuz you use need a lot... i know that's kind of the point, but synonyms are good.
sorry that was long.... yay for jelly!
oh yeah i really like it. i like how the theme is clear throughout the whole thing, not like some weird-ness where you're like, "what was that about now?" good job! ^^b
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