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Published: 2002-10-04 07:04:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 388; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 117
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Description Stepping into shadow
Shrouding all my pain
Fading into nothing
I do it all in vain

There is no one with me
I walk this road alone
A sidewalk cracked and dry
A soul that must atone

The streetlamps dim and flicker
I see the road no more
The light retreats, it matters not
It's a road I've walked before

Tears are freezing to my skin
As cold winds caress my face
The sun is rising soon enough
To offer a warm embrace
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Comments: 10

masakun [2003-07-23 19:20:29 +0000 UTC]

we've all seen that road. the moring sun will alway be there but the person you are right now will die be fore he/she see's it. live life when you want to. when you need to. a very beautiful piece. A+ work.

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remnantsoflove [2003-06-30 18:58:45 +0000 UTC]

This is a great poem, everything about it is great. I don't know what else to say.

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thedeadpoetic [2002-12-19 05:14:34 +0000 UTC]

Very, very well-put.. I think you could have definetly put more into the poem, but, i think everything fits right into place and isn't to long or to short.. otherwise, this is a great poem.. can't wait to read more

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ivory [2002-12-16 23:09:43 +0000 UTC]

very cool. I think I'll read more of your poems. This poem has a feeling I think everyone can relate to, and you illustrate it so clearly.

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tmpst24myst [2002-10-12 11:33:35 +0000 UTC]

There are few changes that I would make to this, if I were to make any...Nothing to change the poem, however. They would only help with the flow a little.. I have to go to work now, but I will come back.

Great poem with excellent images. (heh, I don't usually like rhymes )

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between-balance [2002-10-10 22:06:50 +0000 UTC]

nice work..
i felt alone reading this..
i am alone.. but it hit hard reading this...
awesome work

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evolutionaz [2002-10-06 04:43:05 +0000 UTC]

Now that I can read it a little better! Will have to agree with them excellent as usual. Maybe i can draw a picture for this one. Preferably something not so evil looking like the rest i have drawn for your poems.

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electrikvoice [2002-10-05 16:52:22 +0000 UTC]

I can't agree with the both of them more... beautifully written. There isn't anything that I would change or try to improve on. It's wonderful.

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eadaoin [2002-10-05 08:10:18 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I definately agree with Matrix... totally mind numbing! I think the poem is just fine how it is..and you should definately NOT change it. It gives enough to satiate the reader, but not too much--which provokes the readers' thoughts and makes him think... Wonderful poem!

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matrix7 [2002-10-05 03:37:01 +0000 UTC]

WOW! Totally mind numbing! I am loving this poem very very much...and am completely taken aback by the beauty of it. That last stanza sets it off...

You've earned a Congrats!

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