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CloudNumber8 — The Artist and The Model
Published: 2012-05-16 21:38:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 7290; Favourites: 463; Downloads: 66
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Description She posed for the artist to paint her
She sat so perfectly still
A tremble came across her body
That was way beyond her will

"For that, my dear" said the artist
"I'll paint your blue eyes shut
Forever you'll be cast into darkness
Before you return to dust"

The subject, the model, the lady
Laughed and was not so fussed
"You think you have such power, my dear
In the stroke of your brush?

Don't forget it is I, your subject
That brings beauty to your piece
Without me you would be nothing;
A lush drunk on self belief"

With that the artist grabbed his palette
Ferociously began to paint
Till fatigue encapsulated his bones
And he began to feel faint

"How dare you bring into question
This masterpiece, my life's work
From my hand to brush to canvas
My unique view of this world"

"Artist you are not so special
With strokes many could make
Where as my beauty is as unique
As a falling snowflake

And it is I that fell from Heaven
Onto the blank canvas Earth
As potent as God's silence
And as beautiful as God's words"

But your beauty will fade my dear
Where as my art shall last
It will indeed live on forever
Long after we have passed

And what is beauty without someone
To witness and to observe
And re-create that beautiful vision
Of God's elegant, wonderous work
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Comments: 199

beauty-is-found In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 02:25:56 +0000 UTC]

Oscar Wilde is probably one of my favorite authors,
and you're welcome!

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JeggeJ In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 02:12:15 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing! Your writing is great; I really saw the imagery in my head and felt the emotions and thoughts of the artist and model. This is also a very interesting topic, and I think it's almost like a chicken-and-egg scenario! How the model says the artist needs her, but the artist says people need him, etc...
Loved it Great work ^-^

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CloudNumber8 In reply to JeggeJ [2012-05-17 02:14:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you i am glad that you could picture the scene. When i write i do visualise the characters and even the set almost like its a film.

So its good to know this comes across

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JeggeJ In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 02:25:22 +0000 UTC]

Yesyes

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Loveislightblue In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 01:52:50 +0000 UTC]

A very lovely poem.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to Loveislightblue [2012-05-17 01:56:28 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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Loveislightblue In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 01:57:19 +0000 UTC]

Of course, it's an absolutely wonderful poem!

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HimeAnnalikaLynn In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 01:44:51 +0000 UTC]

this is really good!

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CloudNumber8 In reply to HimeAnnalikaLynn [2012-05-17 01:56:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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SassyAlex In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 01:39:34 +0000 UTC]

Very nice. It makes you question, and definitely sparks ideas. I will be excepting this into #iWriteToInspire . Well done!

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CloudNumber8 In reply to SassyAlex [2012-05-17 01:56:12 +0000 UTC]

excellent, thank you so much for accepting this into the group

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SassyAlex In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-18 21:00:27 +0000 UTC]

Certainly. It really is very nice!

Have a wonderful day~

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CloudNumber8 In reply to SassyAlex [2012-05-19 18:45:45 +0000 UTC]

you too!

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kitty3669 In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 01:26:58 +0000 UTC]

This is very thought-provoking...I'm not sure there's an answer. Faving! I'm sure I'll be thinking about this for a while

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CloudNumber8 In reply to kitty3669 [2012-05-17 01:55:50 +0000 UTC]

thats good to hear Pause for sleep though, and continue to think tomorrow lol

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Eyes-On-The-Ride In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 00:44:49 +0000 UTC]

How interesting. Your poetry definitely has its own unique style. I like this a lot.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to Eyes-On-The-Ride [2012-05-17 01:55:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you. I appreciate that.

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Vegetabelle In reply to ??? [2012-05-17 00:00:16 +0000 UTC]

Huh. Interesting thought. I like it! Made me think.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to Vegetabelle [2012-05-17 00:16:08 +0000 UTC]

thats good to hear, thank you

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LookingGlassInk In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 23:25:11 +0000 UTC]

I enjoyed the poem and I think that you've done some beautiful work with it. I do think that you have a bit of an odd mix of free verse and structured poetry here. Some of the time you've tried to rhyme and other times you haven't. Likewise your syllable count matches in some places and doesn't in others. It makes it a little difficult to read in places, but even so I really enjoyed it. Well worth the effort. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to LookingGlassInk [2012-05-16 23:28:22 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the comment. I do try and keep my syllable count even but sometimes its a balancing act because i dont want to leave certain words out.

Its difficult too because i read over it alot and it seemed fine to me. but i understand how to someone reading it for the first time it might come across quite awkward.

thanks for taking time to read and comment. it means alot

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LookingGlassInk In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 02:01:21 +0000 UTC]

Of course. And it's your work, so as long as it sounds good to you, that's the important part. Always enjoy what you do, not what others tell you that you should. Good luck in the future and take care.

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ExaltedPoet In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 23:21:37 +0000 UTC]

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CloudNumber8 In reply to ExaltedPoet [2012-05-16 23:36:49 +0000 UTC]

lol i should have waited a while between poems really.

i just like to see what new bouncey things you have for me lol

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ExaltedPoet In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-16 23:41:09 +0000 UTC]

I saw it on my page as a comment I'm like yay something new for me to use.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to ExaltedPoet [2012-05-16 23:50:07 +0000 UTC]

i was very impressed are you feeling better today ?

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ExaltedPoet In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 01:43:42 +0000 UTC]

a lot better than yesterday thats for sure just crampy not as painful as it was. thanks for asking ^_^

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Henakuo In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 23:13:13 +0000 UTC]

Being an artist who uses art to feel closer to God, this poem really speaks to me. Wonderful poetry here ^_^

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CloudNumber8 In reply to Henakuo [2012-05-16 23:26:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you. Its great to hear that something i write would speak to you

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SofiaSevero In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 23:02:30 +0000 UTC]

i loved your poem it shows a unique vision

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CloudNumber8 In reply to SofiaSevero [2012-05-16 23:26:30 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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ddsk1191 In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 22:42:28 +0000 UTC]

this is a great poem, nicely composed!!

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CloudNumber8 In reply to ddsk1191 [2012-05-16 23:23:23 +0000 UTC]

thanks alot

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RathanyXD22 In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 22:38:11 +0000 UTC]

That's amazing, great work!

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CloudNumber8 In reply to RathanyXD22 [2012-05-16 23:23:14 +0000 UTC]

glad you enjoyed it

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LunaCrimsonMoon In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 22:35:16 +0000 UTC]

sweet job dude i love it

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CloudNumber8 In reply to LunaCrimsonMoon [2012-05-16 23:23:06 +0000 UTC]

thanks dude

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Ketchup321 In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 22:12:23 +0000 UTC]

This is beautifully written.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to Ketchup321 [2012-05-16 23:22:54 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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Ketchup321 In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-27 19:03:36 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 22:05:17 +0000 UTC]

It's pretty amazing, but i feel like both of them are pretty arrogant, and conceited.

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CloudNumber8 In reply to IMACHILINWITHMALAZER [2012-05-16 23:22:32 +0000 UTC]

yeah they are. Thats how i pictured them actually. I was quite happy to finish the poem and get those characters from my head lol

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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 10:32:03 +0000 UTC]

I really like it actually, IT HAS INSPIRED ME!!


Now..... What should I write about? >.>

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CloudNumber8 In reply to IMACHILINWITHMALAZER [2012-05-17 11:53:16 +0000 UTC]

thats excellent news

thats the good thing about writing, you can write about anything

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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-17 14:33:52 +0000 UTC]

But, But, I don't know what to dOoOoOoo

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NYCrainbow6 In reply to ??? [2012-05-16 21:56:50 +0000 UTC]

this is really something else!!!! its so amazing, and it puts things in perspective. WOW!

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CloudNumber8 In reply to NYCrainbow6 [2012-05-16 23:21:59 +0000 UTC]

thankyou Sara. You are faving alot today. was it because of the pic i posted on your comments maybe it was

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NYCrainbow6 In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-05-16 23:48:43 +0000 UTC]

awwwwww harryyyyyy ok no just kidding XD FOCUS SARA
ahem, no it was because you are SO TALENTED DUUUUUH

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