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DancerBeb — Rain
Published: 2011-01-31 09:08:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 48; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 1
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Stiff ground underneath meIt's cold and wet,
I don't mind.
Rain is pouring violently down.
Drenching everything beneath,
I don't care
A knife has been placed so gently,
Between my ribs and where my heart used to beat
I don't feel a thing.
The piercing air brings a strange sense of comfort
As my body welcomes this numb sensation
How helpful the rain.
It washes away my makeup and tears,
Returning me to my natural form
Curled up, crying, and on the ground
To think something is good
Is a delicate thing
Karmas a bitch and it makes you bleed
Bleed out the things that bring me pain
Hanging heavily on my shoulders
Flowing to the ground
With the sound of rain
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Thanks girl! I'll look into that. Garret, yes it is! And thank you all
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i like it, i have a piece of advice though. i feel like if you removed all the "yet"s it'd be more statement making.
for example:
"A knife has been placed so gently,
Between my ribs and where my heart used to beat..
I don't feel a thing. "
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there ya go. finally got those last couple stanzas work out. i like how you ended it. Karmas a bitch indeed.
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