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Couple things to say about this page.

First off, originally when I planned all this out Applejack had been pretty much the only one talking to Twilight these last few pages. I have this bad habit of having her be the 'spokesmare' of the group, since she's the most serious one. That included the final panel on this page showing the five of them grouped together, and Applejack being the one to offer help.

Obviously I ultimately spread the dialogue around a bit. But what I really like is that you don't know who's talking in that final panel, who's actually offering to help. Because, of course, the answer is that it's really all of them.

The second thing is a bit of advice for anyone who is or is aspiring to be an artist: your art sucks, start over.

Obviously I'm no great artist myself. But look at the original, fully complete version of that middle panel. I mean, it's not terrible, I guess. But compared to the final version it's definitely lacking, badly.

I'm on a pretty tight schedule here; I need to be making at least one of these pages a week. But I still looked at that panel after it was done and said “Nope.” And what I came up with when I redid it is miles better.

On the other hand, don't let that destroy your momentum either. At some point you need to be done. Case in point, the last panel on this page. I'm actually not too thrilled with how it came out, and I really would like to redo it. But, even so, it is still serviceable—whatever I'd come up with would be nowhere near the difference between the two versions of the middle panel. So I decided to just move on.

So there's your artistic advice: What you're doing sucks, try again. But also don't be afraid to move on at some point.

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NeoRogueShadows In reply to ??? [2020-07-23 23:55:33 +0000 UTC]

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AlphamonOuryuuken In reply to ??? [2020-07-23 23:25:57 +0000 UTC]

Newsflash, Chrysalis rejected Starlight when she offered her a chance, Cozy was out of school for friendship for god-knows-how-long and she still double-crossed them, and Tirek denounced his brother for siding with the ponies long ago.

So now, it's not her fault, they chose their path and they chose to remain evil. It's one thing to hold out your hand and offer help, but when that hand is repeatedly smacked away by those who openly make it clear they don't want to change and simply want to continue being horrible, then that's their problem.

These three made it clear they didn't want to change nor did they want any help while I was offering, so they got what they deserved.

Get that through your head and stop pretending Twilight is at fault because they stayed evil.

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AlphamonOuryuuken In reply to AlphamonOuryuuken [2020-07-24 03:11:08 +0000 UTC]

You're unable to reply because I blocked you.

I'm sick and tired of fans like you justifying the villain staying evil just because the heroes didn't do anything when in reality they gave them a chance and reached out to them.

Twilight is not at fault for not reaching out. You are 100% wrong so stop pretending otherwise. Those jerks basically came close to ripping off spikes wings out of spite and openly stated that they were going to torture them. By that point they are pretty much lost all Goodwill and reasons for anyone to want to reform them. You claim I prefer vengeance punishment and suffering? I say that represents you more than anyone else considering the fact that you're basically saying they should have gotten away with that.

The school of friendship was meant to bring others together, if cozy was a student there and yet still was willing to work with a known enemy of Equestria and Rob it of its magic, it's very livelihood for her own gain, then that's her fault, no one else's. Twilight let her attend to school and even made her an assistant, because she thought she was learned. Cozy proved that she wasn't, and got what she deserved.

If Tirek is so selfish that he thinks he's still in the right for what he did a thousand years after he was banished to the underworld, then that's his own fault. No one else.

Queen Chrysalis made it clear that she wanted her Hive to go back to the old days of just draining only then till they would lifeless husk, if she's so desperate that she can't admit that she was wrong, then she doesn't deserve any Reformation.

Twilight did try, they just refused to accept it. therefore she wasn't inclined to save them, they have chosen their fate and they had made it clear they were never going to change.

You don't get to claim that they didn't reach out to any of them when the villains willingly chose to stay evil. Now shut up. You've lost this argument.

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Kirby-Hanyou In reply to ??? [2020-07-22 19:18:46 +0000 UTC]

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AlphamonOuryuuken In reply to Kirby-Hanyou [2020-07-23 12:47:16 +0000 UTC]

Keep your childish banter out of my comments. Those three villains got what they deserved because they refused to change, deal with it.

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shaggy20dope In reply to ??? [2020-07-21 14:40:01 +0000 UTC]

Twilight did not fail them, they failed her.

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