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devious-pixie — Loves Poison
Published: 2003-07-14 07:42:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 108; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 4
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Love is suicide, so I\'mcrossing
my heart with rusty razor
blades...
You alone are everything I ever
wanted
The one I dreamed I could
never find
Though reality isn\'t close to
fantasy
and struggles is all I
find to keep
this love alive
We fight just the same
so that at the end of the
night it\'s just you and I
and no one else
Love is suicide so I\'m
crossing
my heart with rusty razor
blades...
No matter what I do
I find myself falling deeper
in love with you
Killing myself slowy
with this thing, this poison
that we call love
Love is suicide, so I\'m
crossing
my heart with rusty razor
blades...
Only time will tell if
this pain
is pure ecstasy or hell
Love is suicide...and I\'m willingly dying
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Comments: 4
I think its pretty even through suicidal content. I agree with Mr. Stevie Boy that the last line would sound better that way, but it is your poem, you write on your own
Muah. Kandice
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lovely dark decrepid writing.
pretty words made dark with meaning.
i adore the way you slice and slash my eyes with tiny flecks of reality.
fantastic writing.
(ignore me im tired...meh).
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I admire how you compare poison and love, and the second to the last stanza was utterly effective to, great poem.
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Since coming to DA razor blades have become a major turn-off in poetry for me, especially when used in conjunction with mentionings of suicide, mostly because of how overused they are. The repetion of "Love is suicide, so I'm
crossing
my heart with rusty razor
blades..." doesnt seem to serve to do much here. Last thing, the last line seems like it would sound a lot better as "Love is suicide...and I'd willingly die", the way you have it sounds slighltly awkward on the tongue.
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