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Published: 2001-01-08 03:14:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 419; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 85
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"I wish..."- devolution (Sean Maisch); copyright 2001-2005
I wish I could make things better
Break restrictions on the barrier of life
Carry your scarred soul through life
Lift up your broken heart
And heal your wounds
I wish I could rip you away from the painful world
Help you through sorrow
Bring you to happiness
And forget the past
Sometimes...
I wish...
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The more I read this poem the better it gets...good work Sean-don't stop.
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That is messed up man! What is your problem? You don't know love. Your proably only 13 or 14. It's fake man. Just watch it. I'm warning you.
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Hehe, cute babe.
That's my girl right there.
Sneaky.
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I completely love the poem...it sounds like you really love that girl, and by the sounds of it, she probably can't help loving you too. Stay close
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i completely feel what your feeling, i'm goinging throught kind of the same things with a different twist, but yeah man totally
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it's always hard to see a loved one going through sh*t, glad to see u found an outlet... very nice.
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very deep man, very soulful, i love it
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Oh, that's...I don't know how to comment on this, emotions are always hard, even impossible, to explain with words. I can only say it woke up feelings within me that I didn't thought I have. Beautiful.
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"measure wealth not in money, but in what you have that you wouldn't take money for"
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Romantic man
although you could remake it with better rythm and metric... (measured lenght)
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Beautiful. I'm book marking this one. I really love it. You capture the sense of love and wanting so well. I just love how you capture the care. I know exactly how you feel. I think most of us do. Great work.
What have you to teach me?
http://sean.wxs.org
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nice...you obviously care for her very much...
itirep- http://escape.to/itirep1
just bring it
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Nice use of language and structure, there's a lot of feeling in this. Tack's right in my opinion, but very well written.
Goochtek:random bursts of polygonal thought
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only think I would say as maybe a revision is to not repeat life in the first stanza. nice work though.
http://www.emulsion.f2s.com
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beautiful.. i wish i could do that for someone too.. she needs it.
-- matteo --
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www.wastedyouth.org
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