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diluted-e — Ahsin
Published: 2002-05-01 20:32:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 96; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 15
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Description Picture frame
a stint in my brain
your eyes translucent clear
mirror of myself

Got lost in a-maze of you
thoughts caught up in
lost innocence, re-found;
sin would be sweet today
if only in you

caught in a swirl
plain face
against broken pupil
dilating a feeling
unneeded but wanted

and here now
without you
unforgiving pasts
only shackle desires
to passive enrapture
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Comments: 3

pupasoul [2004-04-20 04:53:47 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful writing.

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coldmortality [2002-05-03 07:30:15 +0000 UTC]

Loved the way you put the words together..esp. the first and second stanza....although i really liked the ending line....no need for change here....over all...great poem.

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monkease [2002-05-02 13:03:42 +0000 UTC]

Your imagery is refreshingly fresh (*boggle at word choice*) and the poem is a nice read. Good job!
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monkease
gin and ninjas

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