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Published: 2002-06-24 13:09:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 69; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 7
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Description you are
golden sands
caught in a swirl
peircing retina
a fog of dust
bleeding my eyes

I am
tree rooted
watching you twist
and turn in violent rage,
I am lover waiting
for storms to settle
and quiet calm
rest on me again
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Comments: 6

traerene [2002-12-09 19:48:30 +0000 UTC]

i really like this..nice use of words! i love the metaphors.

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mortalpsyche [2002-10-20 16:46:25 +0000 UTC]

It's not bad, although somehow the punctuation seems off to me. Other than that, not bad m'boy.

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rebelchic [2002-08-19 01:17:59 +0000 UTC]

hmmm i agree with what was said above..but im not gonna type it again cause i dont think reading the same thing over again is any fun...but it was a good read.

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tmpst24myst [2002-08-17 21:57:09 +0000 UTC]

this one seems to be almost harsh...I agree with the above comment..it is just right the second time around..

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nightshaded [2002-08-06 16:13:10 +0000 UTC]

at first read it seems bare, but after reading it again it seemed just right

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weepingdreams [2002-06-24 13:14:10 +0000 UTC]

you captured everything in this, it's really good

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