HOME | DD
Published: 2002-10-18 09:22:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 130; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 5
Redirect to original
Description
This one sits waiting patientlyreading; believing all that is told
intertwined in my words
like old words
feeding off my vitality
Tread softly upon these here floors
this wood groaning to every push
One sits quietly at the pinnacle
thoughts purely chemical
waiting for two to make amends
Disfigured shade morphing against the wall
once separated and back again
from two to one and two again
this metamorphic shadow is dancing;
transcending, listlessness of night
Eyes racing beneath this dark shroud
like phosphorescent buttons; radiating
for this moment, an eternity; as eyes close
this oasis expands and combusts
in a single primordial spring,
like rain comes, crashing over this desert plain
Daphne collapses as Uruk fades;
this animalistic passion embedded firmly
between these four walls;
one shade jerks in a moonlit projection
slowing, stopping, separating to two
Related content
Comments: 4
gaston [2003-01-07 23:46:11 +0000 UTC]
.
i love how you enjamb lines with one another and then impose caesuras in some lines. such style creates a wonderfully dynamic flow of words, which accentuate the richness of the language you use.
the fourth stanza reads most beautifully.
wonderful, wonderful job!
peace.
+g
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
poetrymachine [2002-10-25 15:54:28 +0000 UTC]
very good. Some sweet imagery here. "phosphorescent buttons"... I love terminology like that. s'a beauty...
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
antigrrl [2002-10-21 00:06:57 +0000 UTC]
i'm glad you've finally had time to submit something
i really like the imagery that you provide - wonderful.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0