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This Dragon, at least in my little story, is the Dragon which inspired the Egyptians to create the ancient egyptian god Horus. a Dragon tens of thousands of years old, it's sillhouetted head was seen by the Pharoah at the time, along with several Ancient Egyptian priests, it's beak resembling that of a falcon. it's sheer size, piercing glowing eyes [in the picture, it's planned for modification] and it's brilliant glowing wing patterns [alternating blue and gold feather-like patterns on the black, leathery wings] caused them to believe it was a god. as a result, when it left strange artifacts several days in a row in front of the Pharoah's palace, they were seen as prosperity bringing gifts from the ancient god, and it was ordered that they be placed in numerous prominent monuments within the empire, among which were the eyes of the sphinx in front of the pyramids of Giza [though these were concealed behind stone plates in the shape of eyes to protect them]. and thus Horus was recognised as a major Ancient Egyptian Deity. several thousand years later, in the age of monsters such as Godzilla wreaking havoc across the planet, Horus was awakened, and captured before he could act, and several months later, awoke as a cyborg in a strange, hidden facility somewhere in south america. at one point through many of the following operations to enhance the creature's combat capabilities, a monster attacked their base, destroying the cables pumping a steady stream of sedatives into the creature, it's metabolism burning through what was left, the creature awakening and breaking free...

a detailed profile will replace the basic story above. this is a Cyborg [barely visible. the organisation that captured him tried their best to conceal the mechanics within him to make it less likely an enemy would discover that advantage before it was too late], though in all but a few minor points, has the appearance of a completely organic creature. as you could probably guess from the story above, this Dragon's a Kaiju. the long tail is intentional. any advise on how i can improve it?

Description
This Dragon, at least in my little story, is the Dragon which inspired the Egyptians to create the ancient egyptian god Horus. a Dragon tens of thousands of years old, it's sillhouetted head was seen by the Pharoah at the time, along with several Ancient Egyptian priests, it's beak resembling that of a falcon. it's sheer size, piercing glowing eyes [in the picture, it's planned for modification] and it's brilliant glowing wing patterns [alternating blue and gold feather-like patterns on the black, leathery wings] caused them to believe it was a god. as a result, when it left strange artifacts several days in a row in front of the Pharoah's palace, they were seen as prosperity bringing gifts from the ancient god, and it was ordered that they be placed in numerous prominent monuments within the empire, among which were the eyes of the sphinx in front of the pyramids of Giza [though these were concealed behind stone plates in the shape of eyes to protect them]. and thus Horus was recognised as a major Ancient Egyptian Deity. several thousand years later, in the age of monsters such as Godzilla wreaking havoc across the planet, Horus was awakened, and captured before he could act, and several months later, awoke as a cyborg in a strange, hidden facility somewhere in south america. at one point through many of the following operations to enhance the creature's combat capabilities, a monster attacked their base, destroying the cables pumping a steady stream of sedatives into the creature, it's metabolism burning through what was left, the creature awakening and breaking free...

a detailed profile will replace the basic story above. this is a Cyborg [barely visible. the organisation that captured him tried their best to conceal the mechanics within him to make it less likely an enemy would discover that advantage before it was too late], though in all but a few minor points, has the appearance of a completely organic creature. as you could probably guess from the story above, this Dragon's a Kaiju. the long tail is intentional. any advise on how i can improve it?