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Published: 2012-06-23 17:13:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 45343; Favourites: 753; Downloads: 476
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Let's summon support by cutting across fourth wall !!!
In first comic(Sherman part), I was going to quote M4 Crocodile Sherman in Company of hero.([link] ) but I'm afraid it might offend German people, so I decided to censor it. And I'm not good at designing dialogue, so if anyone have some good ideas to make them sounds funnier, please do tell, I'd like to learn from your creativity.
I'm still trying different ways to present a comic. Hmm...It looks a little messy this time. I need more practice
.Still, hope you like it.
(note: English is not my native language, please feel free to correct me.)
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Love it!
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Ah thank you for pointing that out.
Oh and I do wish to know more about what were you thinking.
Do you mean they are find with the dialogue, just need to correct the grammar?
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Well to start off, in the bottom panel, what you had before ("Is that.. human?") would actually have been correct if you had been trying to emphasize Twilight's confusion, i.e., if Twilight had saying one thing, then trailed off and started a new sentence instead. However, I couldn't have known whether you doing this deliberately or not so I decided to "correct" you as if it had been a single sentence with a lengthy pause in the middle of it.
The top panel is harder to explain (which is why I'm doing it second 
Apologies for any trouble I may have caused if I was wrong about anything, and sorry this is a bit late too. I'm not very good at explaining things so I kept putting it off. Anyway, hope this was enough to clear things up (and sorry for using so many commas)!
P.S. After taking another look at the comic I noticed a few other errors. Most are just missing words here and there, but if you would like I'd be happy to point those out for you as well. Have a good night
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Ah, I get it.
The bottom one were actually the former in your description. I was trying to emphasize Twilight's confusion.
The top one were the latter in your description. They were hoping for some real troops or allies to help them out.
Thank you very much for explaining this to me, and no need to apologize it is very clear.^_^ And I'm very curious about the missing words you mentioned. Please do tell.
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Sure! Sorry for the late reply again, and I will try my best. I'll try to keep this more compact than the last time too.
Column 1, row 5: "Let's go, girls!" (added a comma, since those two sentences should be just one)
Column 2, row 2: "Serious fireworkS!" (unless you were making a pun)
Column 2, row 5: "You meanieS!"
Column 3, row 2: "I know a friend who CAN help!"
Column 3, row 5: "With him, who needs THE Elements of Harmony?"
Column 4, row 5: "Taste the fury of AN internet meme!"
Strictly speaking, it should be "There ARE too many of them" in the first panel of column 4, but in casual conversation I think pretty much everybody substitutes it with "there's" (I know I do 
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Ah it's very helpful, I've corrected all of them.
I have a question though. In the last panel of the Column 4, "Taste the fury of AN internet meme!". If I use "the" instead of "an", will it be appropriate? I was thinking that in that panel, Pinkie was speaking of an specific Internet meme instead of randomly referring to any meme. So I wonder if using "the" is a better choice?
You flattered me
Thank you very much for correcting me.
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Using "the" in place of "an" would be absolutely fine. Sorry it's taken me this long to reply, by the way. Like I mentioned before, I was on holiday (and I still am
In any case, it was no problem at all. I'm just glad I could help.
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Thank you again for your reply.
Wish you have a happy holiday.
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That was amazing 
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Flutterrage is a living weapon! XD
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lol very last right pannel :fluttershy:is that me?) lol
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Pinkie pie has twisted the time and the space! lol
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OH WOW... XD That's awesome... oh god. This is without a doubt the best thing I've seen all week. XD
A Sherman tank, a Sky Dragon God, Chuck Norris, and FusRoShy.... you win the internet, sir. You just... you win. Hands down.
You win.
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"All your Internet is belong to ponies!"
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I assume this is some kind of parody/reference?
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Yes, plenty of them actually.
first one Sherman tank reference Company of Hero.
Second one Slifer reference Yu-Gi-Oh abridged series.
Third one reference famous Internet meme of Chuch Norris's fact.
Fourth one reference another famous Internet meme of dragon call from skyrim.
Different from my previous work, this time I try to make it more comical. And I try to use some mischievous comedy this time. Oh well, it doesn't look good.
But I still think I need to keep trying though, I want to try different ideas and various ways to present them before I find the best way to present myself.Next time I planned to make a silent comic and see how will it turn out.
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No-no, what I meant is - does the concept of a comic itself is a reference to some "meme" or another similar comic? Those are quite popular to make.
Tacky? I wouldn't say so, just... a bit random, haha.
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Oh, no actually. It is just another comic inspired by the idea that Pinkie pie could break the fourth wall.
haha, very random indeed.
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