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implodedvoice — Wailing Riots
Published: 2003-08-03 07:34:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 51; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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More catatonic blue mellow riots mowling down kicked back city streetsPicket sticks and flicked slightly miffed,
Foot flowing over pave not watching streets waltzing zips
steep steady feet keep rolling on down if you stare the feet don’t move it’s the mean
roads who do and – and – and I think the gravels really sting stucked in skin on knees
falling down.
I love whales
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listen to ~sumants .
he may be harsh,
but he is wise,
and knows what he says.
i,
personally,
didn't like the double-use
of 'feet'
in the fourth line.
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Okay, some of the sections of the poem are very interesting, and others are just plain absurd. If this is spoken word, then it's too short. If it's poetry, it needs line breaks and segmentation. If it is blank verse, it has too many words.
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More catatonic blue mellow riots mowling down kicked back city streets
what a striking opening line! overall, quite well executed and worded.
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