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Published: 2004-08-03 05:30:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 455; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 57
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Description These Fishy Eyes of Wanting
8-2-04


The eyes and lies,
Of this two fish whirlwind,
Setting into motion,
A whirlwind of emotion.

The deep, swimming pools,
Deeper and deeper,
Spiraling in every direction,
Two fish looking at me in the reflection.

Staring deep,
Lost within and without,
Falling into sleep,
While still filled with doubt.

Hope is a privilege hoped for,
Constantly wondering what lies in store,
A reference point wanting more,
Constantly wandering for a door.

Whirlpools,
Whirling, spinning, wanting,
Whirlpools,
Fish a constant haunting.

Spiraling and swirling,
The pools of thine eyes,
Up, down, or bottom,
Refresh and breath the skies.

What is perceived is what is seen,
Allow thy slate to be clean,
Disoriented Grayness inbetween,
Remove thyself and find out what it means.

Afraid to allow oneself,
Afraid to be thyself,
Under a self imposed shadow,
Of a Gray hurricane.

Shed all of the blame,
Or it will remain the same,
The lost and hopeless shame,
Within this Gray hurricane.

The fish are lost at sea,
But still afraid to be free,
Open thine eyes and see,
Disperse the lies and be.
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Comments: 3

thomas-mariner [2006-08-02 21:25:11 +0000 UTC]

i don't know why i never commented on this piece before. probably b/c i just told you what i thought on the phone or something.

i really like this. it's ballsy. it made a lot of sense and still makes sense.

it's funny how an outsider would never understand it...but could still understand it.

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darkrune [2004-08-04 05:56:15 +0000 UTC]

Nice. Got some good imagery there. Interesting choice of diction; "thy" instead of "your".

Nothing hits me immediately as to specifically how you can improve this.

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TrippyFuzz [2004-08-03 08:08:38 +0000 UTC]

Nice.

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