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Published: 2011-06-29 02:59:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 42; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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By my count 3 hours of this planets time have passed. In that time Nemi and I have observed our surroundings and the vegatation on this planet is amazing and beautiful. Durring our observations an Irken transmission responded "This is Irken Invader Zim, I have recieved your transmission where is your location?" I had Nemi scan for our coordinates and responded with our longitude and latitude. Zim responded "I am on my way fellow Irken." I sighed with relief and told Nemi "We have a new home." 20 minutes or so had passed when finally Zim showed up. His ship landed by us and Zim and his robot exited the craft. He said "What is your name?" I responded "I am Dem and this is Nemi were exiles of Irk" Zim said as one of his antenna raised "Exiles, why did they send you here if i am invading this planet?" I responded "They sent me here because the tallest lied to you Zim about this planet, I found your file and read it this planet isnt in 'Impending Doom 2' it was given to you as an assignment to kill you." Zim yelled in shock and anger "The Tallest tried to kill me! I WILL HAVE MY REVENGE!!!" I calmed him down and explained to him how i got here. Zim offered me a home. I accepted and from there he and I allied against the armada. For now, we are rebels..Related content
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enigmatia [2011-06-29 06:13:19 +0000 UTC]
Aww... so I see your character is happy with living on Earth! Cool.
Spelling error - fix "were" with "we're" from "were exiles of Irk". Put a comma after Nemi in that same sentence too.
You still need to capitalise a lot of those pronouns. you remember the captial for Zim but not the "I"'s or the Tallests sometimes.
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