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Description EDIT// Thank you The-Royal-Ink for offering to color, line and everything else on the reference for me! It looks amazing! ;v; So it's what I'm using from now on. 

EDIT #3// Added and updated her information.  


There! Finally got around to update Ally's reference sheet from the digital 2014 one. So, I hope this helps a lot! 

Plus, that old reference sheet was making me cringe a little due to my lack of proper anatomy. 

Also please read the backstory/history link below. It explains most of the things involving her powers, her death and her overall relationships with characters. This is only a summary/reference!  

Though thank you all who supported me and her ;w; It's honestly very surprising!

~Ika

So here is a revamp of an old deviant of mine of Ally's reference. xD
Along with information:

Name: Ally
Real Name: Adeline Abendroth (from past life)
Nicknames:
  • Slender Doll
  • Ally-Doll
  • Nightmare Puppet
  • Victorian Ghost Child
  • Nightmare Bringer
  • Wind-Up Child
  • Operator's Doll
  • Operator's Puppet
Age: 118 years of age (Looks 17-18 years old- due to slow aging)
Gender: Female
Ethical Origin: German- she was born in East Berlin
Place/Type of Residence: Black Woods Asylum, Germany
Species: Half-Human/ Half-Slenderbeing
Left/ Right handed
Languages Spoken: German (Native Language), English (Intermediate)
Personality: 
  • She's sweet to the ones she knows well
  • Childish in mannerisms
  • Curious about her surroundings
  • Very dependent on others
  • Overprotective at times for her perceived "family"
  • Tends to be clingy to certain people
  • Sensitive to certain emotional stimuli (i.e anger, and fear )
  • Can be a little emotionally unstable if riled up.
  • She can act rather aloof at times, sometimes not paying any mind to what's happening around her due to her being mentally preoccupied due to the voices of her illness.
Quirks: 
  • Tends to shy away from strangers that she detects as slightly dangerous or a threat.
  • Tends to cling onto the ones she gets emotionally attached too and will get jealous if another person comes in the life of the one she clings onto (like a girlfriend/boyfriend to the person that Ally's attached to)
  • She gets overwhelmed if there is too much emotional stimuli or high levels of stress and might go Nightmare without meaning to.
  • Tends to hide from things that cause her fear
Sexual Preference:  Pansexual
Relationship: Taken by Weeping Forest by pnckes

Date Of "Birth": December 6th, 1895 (Date of resurrection) 
Astrological Sign: Sagittarius (November 22 - December 21) 
Weight: 120 Lbs (Normal)/ 170 Lbs (Nightmare)
Height: 5' 4' (Normal)/ 6' 1' (Nightmare)
Eye Color: Blue
Skin Color: Light grey
Hair Color: White
Distinguishing Features:
  • Has a large brass clockwork wind-up key in her lower back. This is how her vitals are still working.

  • Large torn and jagged mouth in her Nightmare form. Also bleeds an inky black substance that has the consistency of blood from her torn flesh and tear ducts.

Interests: Doll Making, Sewing, Drawing, Playing Hide and Seek, Cooking, and Exploration
Favorite color: Blue!
Theme Songs
Normal Form:"My Child" by Disturbed
Nightmare Form: "Indestructible" by Disturbed

Stats:

Normal:

  • Intelligence: 5 out of 10.

  • Physical Strength: 6 out of 10: Most of her strength is in her tendrils

  • Social Skills: 4 out of 10: Has a mentality of a child and tends to interact as such.

  • Stamina: 4 out of 10: She is known to get easily tired if worked up for too long

  • Perception: 8 out of 10.: Has heightened awareness thanks to her half blood nature. This includes thoughts and feelings through a telepathic link she can engage with others.

  • *Weapon Prowess: 5 out of 10: Knows enough to use bladed weapons defensively

Nightmare:

  • Intelligence: 8 out of 10: Has a mentality of a rather psychotic teenager; acts her perceived age

  • Physical Strength: 8 out of 10: Most of her strength is in her tendrils and is stronger due to adrenaline and rage

  • Social Skills: 6 out of 10: Can be quite sociable if not enraged. If enraged, her social skills are a 3

  • Stamina: 7 out of 10: Higher stamina due to rage and adrenaline.

  • Perception: 9 out of 10: Has heightened awareness thanks to her half blood nature. Awareness is heightened by one due to adrenaline.

  • *Weapon Prowess: 7 out of 10: Knows how to use bladed weapons defensively, lethally and effectively

Fears: 
  • Electricity
  • Fire
  • Scientists and Doctors (due to being captured a few times and experimented/dissected alive)
  • Nightmares
  • The Dark
Special items:  
  • Her signature black voodoo doll
  • Carries needle and threads to stitch anything up back together.
  • Her key is always in her back but there is a spare if its destroyed or torn out.
Powers/Abilities: 
  • Telepathy
  • Teleportation over short distances
  • Black Tendrils from Back
  • Nightmare Form  (triggered when she is highly distressed or when she's in bodily danger.)
Weapons:  
  • Surgical Knives (Main weapon/Normal) 

  • Chef/Butcher Knives (Nightmare) 

  • Claws and Teeth (Nightmare)

  • Her tendrils (Both)

Weaknesses: 
  • Electricity (Temporarily paralyzes her from the key stopping and can't move)
  • Sharp Objects (such as knives, glass, blades etc.) (She has human organs and can be stabbed and slashed)
  • Fire (Skin can't heal itself) 
  • Emotional Stress (Causes her Nightmare Form)
  • Her Key (Weakest spot in combat and most vital part!)
  • Tendrils (Can be ripped out or cut off- causes blood-lost in long periods of time)
  • Exorcism (She's undead) 
  • Necromancy (She's Undead)
  • Her Turquoise Soul Gem- (Anchors her soul to her body and is a main source of her powers due to the Slender blood being trapped in the crystals)
  • During the winter months, she sleeps heavily in a hibernation phase for several weeks on end so, she is vulnerable and unable to fight back due to being in deep sleep. 
Strengths:
  • She is very agile for her state, and can contort her body when in Nightmare form due to her flexible spine. Though, if she stretches too far, her wires connecting her gears might come taunt, halting her movements and causing her great pain.
  • Inhuman strength in her tendrils and her body- shows most when she is pissed and also in her "Nightmare" form
  • Immune to poison due to being undead and immune to most psychic attacks given her halfblood nature.
  • Psychically attuned to surroundings
  • Resourceful when under pressure
Cause of Death (Before Resurrection) : Murder by mutilation from a hatchet by the head matron of the asylum- being struck so many times that she was pretty much cut into pieces.

Backstory:
 
  • Childhood: Born on November 8th, 1885 in East Berlin, and raised by the youngest of the older brothers Johnathan. She was born with Undifferentiated Schizophrenia, and was shunned by her mother, two eldest brothers and abused by her father. 
  • Adolescence: At age five, she was sent to the Black Wood Asylum outside of Berlin and kept there for the remaining five years of her life and leading up to her death, she was hunted down as she was fleeing the asylum (which she had help from Nurse Ann) through the woods. This resulted in her being murder by mutilation from a hatchet- being struck so many times that she was pretty much cut into pieces with her limbs cut off and her chest cavity being cut open by the blows as well as some damage to her head and neck. Resurrection soon followed several months after the incident.
  • Adulthood: N/A
Origin Creepypasta: ORIGIN CREEPYPASTA: Rebirth

Relationships:

  • Parents: Annelie Grünewald (Foster Mother- Deceased), Slenderman (Father Figure/ Foster Father)
  • Siblings: None
  • Children: None 
  • Relatives: None as far as she knows
  • Partner: Taken by No Eyes  (by CrossDressingPanda )
  • Familiar: None 
  • Mentors: Slenderman; Various Proxies

Friends:

  • Ravon
  • No Eyes
  • High Voltage
  • Stitches
  • Dream
  • Elmer
  • Psyche
  • Lolly Dolly
  • Amnesia
  • The Cat Hunter 
  • Grace
  • Amnesia.EXE
  • Suicide Sadie
  • Lazari
  • Gentlemen
  • Victoria The Wooden Doll

Allies: 

  • MOD 
  • Mary Annette
  • Insomnia
  • She-Demon
  • GeekSheek
  • Rouge
  • Xena
  • Tears
  • Graveyard
  • Harley the Plague Proxy
  • The Hangman
  • The Broken Hearted Doll
  • Lulu 

Rivals:

  • Grinner
  • Fidget Bridget
  • Voodoo Doll
  • Scarecrow
  • Crossroads
  • Mother Russia
  • Massacre Queen
  • Pestilence
  • Jeff the Killer
  • Nemesis

Enemies:

  • Zalgo
  • Katazumi
  • Eclipse
  • Mr. Stripes
  • Soothsayer 
  • Plurality #2287
  • The General
  • Bella Luna
  • Bloody Mary
  • The Gambler
  • Toy Maker
  • The Hive 
  • Elena
  • Elinor
  • Justice

Notes: 

  • Her real name is Adeline Abendroth. However she doesn't recognize this name as it's from her past life.
  • Schizophrenic (Undifferentiated category) - Due to her mental illness, she claims to hear voices, can act with violence, argumentativeness and see things that aren't there (Hallucinations). It also causes her to have a childish mentality despite her age.
  • Due to dying at the age of 10, she is stuck with the mentality of a ten year old despite her appearance.
  • She has no pigment in her hair so it's white and has little to no pigment left in her skin so it has a grey tint to it. (Similar to a corpse)
  • Very emotionally unstable.
  • She "ages" very slowly due to the Slenderblood within her.
  • Her brass key is the only way she moves around and survives. Its connected to gears within her spinal cord that are connected to blood veins, nerves and other connections to keep her organs and other body functions working
  • She only has weak copies of some of Slenderman's powers. It was granted due to a complication during her resurrection after being sewn up. These powers though are too much for a human soul so it has caused two sides of her mind due to aggravation of her schizophrenia - Normal Form (which is her human side) and Nightmare Form (Her monster/Slender being side) 
  • She was first stitched together in preparation for resurrection, creating the haphazard stitching all across her body, then Slenderman created a soul gem for her to be bound to her body. In the creation of the gem, some of his blood got mixed into the formation of the crystals, which caused the transferring of some of his abilities onto her; though these are weak copies of these abilities. Due to this, as mentioned above, it aggravated her mental state of mind and her already unstable soul so it created two sides to balance out the power given to her to her human side.
  • She's not technically considered a proxy, as the proxies protect her when they are idle, but still follows the rules and takes orders from Slender.
  • Carries a comfort toy of a black voodoo doll that she hates to part with- take it away and she will throw a fit!
  • Keeps her surgical knives hidden in her boots and her pins and needles inside hidden pockets in her over skirt of her dress.
  • Carries around black thread and a sewing needle just in case her seams in her skin come loose from age or damage.
  • During winter months, Ally, due her slenderbeing side, tended to hibernate with long bouts of slumber for a week or so and awaken for a few days of alertness before going back to sleep. It's odd but it also makes the job for protecting her much easier for the idle proxies 
  • If in front of a mirror, Ally herself will see her normal reflection. However, bystanders might actually see a glimpse of Nightmare Ally instead in place of the doll's reflection.
  • She has memory "blanks" every time she recovers from her Nightmare form. She will not remember anything that has happen during that time. She call these blanks "Black outs"
  • Her Nightmare Mode is a last resort attack- if Ally gets too worked up in anger or sadness (or any other strong negative emotion), gets extremely afraid or is wounded enough that she can't fight back, it trigger's her Nightmare Form transformation
  • Can get very attached to one or more people and might react to them being harmed or injured

Nightmare Form Notes:

Her behavior can break down into two main traits-

  • Childish but in a more twisted sense- this is the personality trait that shows when Ally normally goes Nightmare. It resembles an psychotic adolescent. It involves her glee and pleasure to harm and kill everything that she could get her hands on- including the one who pissed her off. 
  • Mature but very sarcastic and sharped tongue- This is a rare one, sometimes portrayed as her version of Slender's "inherited" intelligence- spits insults and can actually function like a normal 18 year old girl unlike her Normal counterpart.  Although most times she only uses this trait if she wants to lure victims to follow or play mind games with them or is speaking through her "human" side with a temporary hold onto the body. Oddly protective of her other side since after all they share the same mind and body. Also tends to be very jealous of her other half given she's always "put to sleep" so her normal half can return to "normal"

Nightmare Form Combat Tip(s):

  • When Ally's key is pulled out, it causes the gears embedded on her spine to stop turning, making her fully paralyzed and unable to move. Also can cause slow death by simply lack of oxygen circulation from the blood through the heart. A side effect of this method is each time you pull it out in her Nightmare Form, it gets harder and harder to pull out each time afterwards.
  • Be persistent in combat- wearing her down into exhaustion or simply taking her down so she can't fight back is a good way to revert her to her Normal Form.
  • Her Nightmare side can take more damage/pain than her normal self, making the illusion of being indestructible. If she gets too overwhelmed though, she will collapse due to either blood loss or just an overload of pain reception. Another thing that will revert Ally back to normal is the removal of her key. This causes mass paralysis and makes NM Ally immobile, forcing her to return to normal. A side effect is that it gets harder and harder to pull the key after the first time doing it.

Misc. Notes:

  • The only reason Annelie Grünewald stayed with Ally and Slender is because she was in a way forced to. It was either keep the slaughter of the asylum a secret by remaining there or be killed by Slender. As well as that she was the reason Slender resurrected Ally in the first place as she was the one who let the girl escape. She only went to war later on to avoid suspicion and the discovery of Slender and Ally.
  • Annelie Grünewald dies in service as a nurse during WW1 saving Johnathan (who was Adeline’s older brother who tried to protect Adeline in their time together) Johnathan dies several years later in action.
  • Ann also was the one who made Ally her prized black and red voodoo doll that the living doll carries around. It was a gift on Ally’s “birthday” before Ann left for war.
  • Ally regards Annelie Grünewald as Mommy because of waking up to her and Slenderman after her resurrection. The same reason applies to Slenderman plus this was solidified by the realization of the “similar” powers between the myth and the doll. (Its like a baby duck sees you and think you're Mommy)
  • Ally’s extremely sensitive to the topic of “Mommy”; she still believes her "mom" will come back home.

Quotes 

  • "I go by what Daddy asks of me."
  • "Beware..the shadows will consume you."
  • "Wanna play a game?"
  • "Am I a real person or an abomination?"
  • "Tick tock goes the clock..."
  • "I'm human...Well..sort of human..."

Further References (Please click!)
TRADITIONAL REF: Ally Anatomy Doodle + Misc. Notes
COLOR TRADITIONAL DOODLE: Hatchet Wounds
Nightmare Ally's Anatomy
Ally's Dress Design
Portrait of a Doll (Digital)
Ally's Color Palette
Ally's form height comparisions
Ally's Outfit and Character Notes
Ally's Transformation to Nightmare Notes
Doll's Madness



Further Insight/Information on Ally:
Ally's Complete Bio (OUTDATED)
Ally's Character Summary (SOMEWHAT OUTDATED)
Ally's Powers Essay (OUTDATED)



And there we go!

Slender Doll Ally and artwork (c) me!
Coloring/Redesign of Ref (c) The-Royal-Ink  

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Comments: 567

InvaderIka In reply to ??? [2016-10-16 20:16:36 +0000 UTC]

Aww thank you!

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PorcelainBite In reply to InvaderIka [2016-10-17 03:05:34 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome~

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TragicFanatic In reply to ??? [2016-09-23 22:28:41 +0000 UTC]

She reminds me of an edgy anime character, that has a 'dark side.' Oh well.

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InvaderIka In reply to TragicFanatic [2016-09-24 00:27:15 +0000 UTC]

To each there own! 

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TragicFanatic In reply to InvaderIka [2016-09-24 00:36:36 +0000 UTC]

XD Oh well. I suppose I do like it. It has a better design than many I've seen, and it looks like you worked very hard on it (considering all of the fanart, stories, time put into it, etc). Cheers.

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InvaderIka In reply to TragicFanatic [2016-09-24 02:47:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you ovo

I tried and trialed I suppose. 

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samicat224 In reply to ??? [2016-09-17 02:11:44 +0000 UTC]

* starts playing guitar * fuck this shit I'm out , mhm , fuck this shit I'm out , no thanks , don't mind me imma just grab my stuff and leave , accuse me plz , fuck this shit I'm out , nope , fuck this shit I'm out , alright then , I don't know what the fuck just happened , but I don't really care imma get the fuck up out of here , fuck this shit I'm out! 😐

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InvaderIka In reply to samicat224 [2016-09-17 10:21:37 +0000 UTC]

The door of no fucks given is right over there dear! ~

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samicat224 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-09-17 12:43:19 +0000 UTC]

thx * walks out door with head held high *

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randomuffin In reply to ??? [2016-09-14 20:05:31 +0000 UTC]

I like it but maybe she shouldn't be slenders daughter. I feel like if she is she isn't fully her own character. plus its quite common to find slenders daughter in the creepypasta fandom nowadays. other than that she's pretty good

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InvaderIka In reply to randomuffin [2016-09-17 10:21:52 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your input dear!

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randomuffin In reply to InvaderIka [2016-09-17 11:38:25 +0000 UTC]

no prob

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randomuffin In reply to randomuffin [2016-09-14 20:12:45 +0000 UTC]

I also don't like how you spout off the slender symbol just for decoration or to say "HEY I'M SLENDERS DAUGHTER!!!!! WORSHIP MEEEEEE!!!!" it kinda feels unoriginal, ya know?

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wolfygirl9 In reply to ??? [2016-09-07 01:35:23 +0000 UTC]

A little too edgy of a character for me.Also being slenders daughter is a bit unoriginal(Atleast she isnt a female version of jeff that says "DONUUT ST33L!!!" under it.Everything is is good.The anatomy is decent.keep doing a good job!  

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InvaderIka In reply to wolfygirl9 [2016-09-17 10:21:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your input dear!

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Hutress-Fan In reply to ??? [2016-08-30 17:44:25 +0000 UTC]

" Rivals:

  • Mother Russia "

Seems legit

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InvaderIka In reply to Hutress-Fan [2016-08-30 19:31:46 +0000 UTC]

Pfttttt xD

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PinkCaker In reply to ??? [2016-08-30 11:27:42 +0000 UTC]

Just wondering, where is Black Woods Asylum? 

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InvaderIka In reply to PinkCaker [2016-08-30 12:19:02 +0000 UTC]

In the Black Forest of Germany

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KyleStrawberry In reply to ??? [2016-08-28 03:11:10 +0000 UTC]

this is one of the good creepypasta i had seen in awhile
in other words this is a really good oc and a beautiful and creepy oc

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InvaderIka In reply to KyleStrawberry [2016-08-28 18:10:08 +0000 UTC]

Oh thank you! ;A;

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Artcrazy1223 In reply to ??? [2016-08-19 04:58:40 +0000 UTC]

I actually like the dress, but maybe add a little to make it a bit more scary? Or not, I just see a dress and think it's cute, and I do like how it's an older kind of dress....
But that's a lot of Proxy Symbols/The Operator Symbols.....
maybe just on the skirt part and not the sleeves? Either way I like your OC!
(Which is dare because I usually hate all OCs, including my own so.....)

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Artcrazy1223 In reply to Artcrazy1223 [2016-08-19 05:22:35 +0000 UTC]

Sorry if I seemed a bit critical...

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rosetttita In reply to ??? [2016-08-11 17:41:05 +0000 UTC]

Hello 
you can use your OC for EDI with mine ?, if you want? 
indeed beautiful work XD 

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Moonglower In reply to ??? [2016-08-07 21:23:16 +0000 UTC]

Ally.

I am very happy about the conversion from a burning red to a nice shade of maroon. I adds in mysteriousness to it! This helps to create a creepier look to it, though the overuse of proxy symbols/operator signs is a bit annoying. Maybe just one proxy symbol or none at all would be enough?
Heck, those are A LOT of nicknames. Stick to around 1-3 and keep our brains from exploding because of having to remember each of those, if we are to do so.
The age of 118 should make the character look 118. The ages 15-18 in the Creepypasta fandom are danger zones that you should not draw near to in any case. At least the normal form looks around 12 or so. But being 118, maybe you could find inspiration for a different, more old look from the Beldam in Coraline. That character is fearsome and creepy.
Here's a link for reference: vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/c…
(You could also search up "The Beldam")
It is very good that this person isn't just a random American or Asian Creepypasta I usually find lying around when I search for Creepypasta OCs. German takes a nice turn and twist to the usual.
At first I thought this character was part doll as well, with the brass key wind-up and all. I guess not.
It sounds like this Nightmare form comes out often... Does that mean she pretty much has these unlimited powers almost all the time? There should be more of a limitation to their accessibility.
The relationship wasn't very necessary... Though I guess for role-playing it might be sort of vital?? I dunno.
Including the date of actual birth and death is needed at the top just so it doesn't leave us hanging until getting around the middle. Those two are very vital. It just helps us to understand their background and past life more.
Her fear of nightmares seems a bit hypocritical since Ally is basically a living, breathing Nightmare (heh..... puns).
Knives of any type are overused in the Creepypasta fandom. Please just make her stick to the claws, jaws, and slender tendrils. (It was almost a perfect rhyme...)
I would think water + brass key = trouble. This is because it has a chance of rusting, but discoloration is at a higher chance.
Sounds like a pretty brutal past.... Though I'd expect them all to be much more humane than THAT. Don't her past life oh so terrible. And I would doubt parents would send away a child with that disorder to a mental asylum. She is still sane, not talking or acting out of hand, really.
Why resurrect Ally? Was there a real reason for it? Did she even hold any potential? EXPLAIN.
There are pigments everywhere. She does have them in her hair, they just don't absorb colors.
The "Slenderblood" changes nothing. Slender looks frigging ancient, and if this 'child' is 118, then it should probably be shown.
I doubt the Slenderman was that bad at the creation of the soul gem that his blood has gotten mixed in. The gem in itself is just a cheap excuse for powers and stronger connections to the Slenderman.
Keeping knives in her boots sounds like it will give Ally a bunch of cuts in her feet. ("Ders a snake in mah boot!" I just had to.)
How is Ally human and slendertrash (nothing else to call the Slender DNA or anything related, on that note) if she is a doll? No excuses. Being a doll is being a freaking doll. Nothing more, nothing less.
Is there nothing else to call BLANKS? Just call it Blanks if that is exactly what it was thought of at first. What will she call actual losses of consciousness? Blacker Outs? Why?? I dunno. You deal with it however you want to. Change it, or keep it the same. I don't really care that much about it.
Ally is still 118... Just sayin'.
How many brass keys does this doll have!? You could basically resurrect her as many times as you would like if you had an unlimited supply! Aka: Unlimited lives/power. I dunno. All I mean to say is that it makes her seem immortal.
I would think Annelie would be murdered in both situations... And how would German authorities to think that this woman single-handedly runs a mental asylum? NO ONE would think that. It would seem as shady as the shadows themselves. 
So since the Nurse Annelie has diminished, the 'mental asylum killing' is now under heavy suspicion and Slenderman and Ally the Doll will be found out in a matter of time? That's how I am interpreting your words. Is this confusion, or correct comprehension?
Who would create a dark voodoo doll for a child before they leave for service? I would think it would be more likely a teddy bear or something less dark and creepy would be sent. And although they had been resurrected to this darker world of Creepypasta, the 10 year old mentality, as said, 'stays with.' Ya know?
I'm quite sure at age 118, the Slenderman would explain everything because it is Creepypasta, they must tough it out!
These quotes seem like they never happened again except the: "Wanna play a game?" and "Am I an abomination..or a real person?"
The rest seem a little too much. Just stick with 1-2 quotes please!!!
I doubt this kid would be chopped up soooooo much in that distinct way. One slice to the neck and this person probably would have left. But she was a special snowflake that got all this slicing and dicing.
.... Lucky doll being 5'4 at 10...... -hella jealous-

Still meh.
5.5/10....
If one is at the bottom, the only way to go is to the top.
Just keep making adjustments and improvements and you will get to the perfection!

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Suicideplanet In reply to Moonglower [2017-06-27 12:23:20 +0000 UTC]

I go with you're conclusion!

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InvaderIka In reply to Moonglower [2016-08-08 03:48:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the input dear

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Moonglower In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-08 12:08:30 +0000 UTC]

No prob, bob.

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Moonglower In reply to Moonglower [2016-08-07 21:23:40 +0000 UTC]

I did not plan for it to be insanely long.... Oh well.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to ??? [2016-08-05 15:02:25 +0000 UTC]

again she doesn't look scary because the dress and the oparater signs just make it laughable, the dress would get in the way of such attacking and the oparater signs are too much.

And it stole aspects of slenderman......making it kinda mary sue ish

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Dark-Heart-Warning In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-24 22:25:00 +0000 UTC]

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to Dark-Heart-Warning [2016-08-24 23:14:36 +0000 UTC]

ok, don't be surprised if i get harsh because i don't like giving sugar to make the medacine go down im like "fuck you take it like an adult!" xD

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Dark-Heart-Warning In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-24 23:21:18 +0000 UTC]

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to Dark-Heart-Warning [2016-08-24 23:30:24 +0000 UTC]

^^ I am harsh when it comes to helping, so take it as tough love, I do want you to improve so don't think i'm hating on you or anything like that alright?

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 00:00:14 +0000 UTC]

She is on all retrospects a forced hybrid of a slenderbeing and a human hence why she has powers similar to Slendermans. The weaknesses and explanation to why she has them is in the reference description

In all honestly, she isnt in combat situations that much. She has no reason not to change in new attire when she is sheltered and protected by others. It does however become much more decayed and easier to move when she goes nightmare.

Now the operator symbols is typical of those that belong to Slenderman. She iss his creation and is marked on her back and her attire to show she belongs to the entity. Its not silly if you think of it that way.

But all this aside, its up to you amd your opinion is yours.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 00:03:23 +0000 UTC]

yeah in my opinion the operater symbol is used to much...

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 00:18:58 +0000 UTC]

Well, thank you for your input.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 00:29:17 +0000 UTC]

yeah because it's.... idk how to say it but it looks mary-sueish have you seen poopy the killer? Well if that person wasn't a troll the way they used the operater symbol is like how you use yours

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 00:37:49 +0000 UTC]

Excuse me..... ?
Dear ive explained why she has it. Goodness this is just rude.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 02:05:41 +0000 UTC]

Im not trying to be rude really.... it's just I can't let that get passed me... It's a pet peeve of mine when I see "the killer" or " a slenderman like creature" it makes me so enraged and thats the only thing I can focus on...

Did you explain why she's like that?

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 02:56:24 +0000 UTC]

In the note section of her reference dear.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 03:03:41 +0000 UTC]

ok, because it's good to explain EVERY little detail to us like we are drooling babies, like how is she this way, why is she this way, what, who, where, and ect. (you probably did that but it's a good note to keep)

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 03:04:59 +0000 UTC]

As I've learned while developing developing her for the past 3 years.
Hope everything's cleared up.

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 03:57:31 +0000 UTC]

okie ^^
Oh and btw knifes aren't that relyable as weapons (as movies and horror stories are lead to believe) most maybe all knives were made to cut raw thoud out meat not really cut into someone.

And she's a doll right? (or meant to look like a doll) I suggest making her look like a victorian doll, you know creepy and cracked looking, worn out and such. Because adding just those two lines on the sides of her mouth looks like face paint... 

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InvaderIka In reply to PuppyBaby15 [2016-08-06 12:21:08 +0000 UTC]

She's made out of skin. Her whole body was stitched back together so, I don't think I can really make her cracked per say. 

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PuppyBaby15 In reply to InvaderIka [2016-08-06 19:13:49 +0000 UTC]

well, making her looked ripped at least ^^

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Drivinghawk--Kennels In reply to ??? [2016-07-22 22:16:11 +0000 UTC]

X3 this oc is beautiful! i was wondering if i could use her in a base?

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InvaderIka In reply to Drivinghawk--Kennels [2016-07-24 14:59:02 +0000 UTC]

Yes you may <3

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Drivinghawk--Kennels In reply to InvaderIka [2016-07-24 19:56:51 +0000 UTC]

Yay  thx so much!

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Sesshomarul182 In reply to ??? [2016-07-19 19:20:31 +0000 UTC]

Hey I saw someone make a rant on this she/he's on tumblr and that is her/his blog ihavegivenuphumanity.tumblr.co… I don't know how to show you the rant but I just wanted to ask if you know about this and if you allowed it?

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