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PetitAngelOfTheNight [2017-01-09 23:18:28 +0000 UTC]

But he'll (or more like it but let's go for he) be back... He did it once, he'll do it again  

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taemart [2017-01-07 14:40:06 +0000 UTC]

nice

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Zerna [2017-01-06 21:40:39 +0000 UTC]

I'd just like to give these comics a critique, since you've been doing them for a while. Feel free to ignore if you're only drawing them to get an idea out of your head, but if you're actually trying to get laughs or develop humor, here's my critique.

There are some promising ideas in these comics, with funny prompts or subjects--but the art/execution of them are very...and here's the bluntest part of this critique: Boring. Over this comic and the last one, literally 75% of the panels were just the same characters' face copy-pasted in the panels, with the eyebrows or mouth slightly changed. The EYES didn't even point in a different direction, except one panel, and even that was slight. That doesn't make humor; it's just dull to look at, and feels cheap because the artist simply copy-pasted all the heads or bodies or faces, and it is an unfortunately common thing in a lot of webcomics, including here on DA. Humor comes from changing expressions, often exaggerated ones--and BODY LANGUAGE to go along with it. This character's faces barely change, even when a sticky note JUMPS onto it. The character throwing the note into a trash can is stiff, showing absolutely no emotion or body language about what they're feeling. We're just...looking at the same expression, the same pose, for four panels---7 if you count the last comic.

So, I'd say if you'd like to get more attention/laughs out of these comics, try working on the expressions and body language to go with the dialogue more. Like...THIS kind of stuff: s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/5…

Or this: s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/o…

anyway, that's just my two cents.

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Cupcake-Plusher [2017-01-06 14:10:41 +0000 UTC]

This is what I do. XD 

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