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MNS-Prime-21 β TFP Weekly 4 - Episodes 18-23
Published: 2013-09-03 22:35:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 12888; Favourites: 99; Downloads: 18
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The winning scene in TFP weekly 4.I had a tricky time deciding, but then I came to this scene....remembering how much I LOVE wen Optimus grinded his teeth
I say putty darn sexy I think 
Note: didn't add Autobots (Arcee and Bulkhead) or Steve and the backgrounds is not exactly accurate, but I did they way the best I can
so, I apologize 1. -Ratchet: "Now was THAT so difficult?" *draws sword to prepare yet another possible torture*
2. -Optimus: "Ratchet!" *blocks the blow* "WHAT are you doing?!"
3. -Ratchet: "Getting results..."
-Optimus: "...AND breaking protocol."
4. -Optimus: "That was a Decepticon Miner: Servent Class, not Warrior Class."
5. -Ratchet: "Ooh and let me guess: I'm JUST the medic."
6. -Optimus: "Autobots do not inflict harm unless all other options have been exhausted."
7. -Optimus: "It is was separates us from the Decepticons."
Check the rules on my journal to join the conversation and a chance to maybe have your favorite scene drawn like this (depending on the majority on the conversation) mns-prime-21.deviantart.com/joβ¦
Gender-Swap design (c) Me ^^
Optimus Prime, Ratchet, and backgrounds (c) Transformers Prime (c) Hasbro
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It's cool ^^ Do ya mean Carly?
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I meant the woman that ended up with Galloway's post.
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Oh Charlotte Mearing! Yeah, don't cross lines or push their buttons.
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Now, as much as I like these comics, I have a bit of well...constructive hints and things I want to point out.Β
note: I love your work, and you are Β very nice person, I just wanted to point out these things.
1. I am not sure if this is the intention or not, but these characters look far to young to represent the characters of Optimus and Ratchet in my opinion. They, the look like they are 12 Years old.
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Β To make then older, make the faces thinner and longer. Head smaller and shoulders more brad. and the noses longer, also make the hips bigger to, theΒ breastsΒ look strange when the hips don't match.
2. The designs. Ratchets looks very nice, but I don't think he'd have such a Β short skirt or wear those kind of shoes. The glasses are spot on though. And as for Optimus, the shorts do NOT fit him at all. and neither does him showing his bra. (if it's an undershirt I take it back) I know your trying to make this look like anime school girl style and all, but to me it does not vibe well. Especially Optimus's piercings.
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Β I'd recommend changing their clothing and make it more covering, and more original , add more if you need to, you can do whatever you need to, hats, scarfs, gloves, bandannas, anything.
3. Drawing. I am rather confused by the anatomy, the legs are not the right shape the arms are to long and the breasts are lob-sided the foreheads are to big, and the head shapes look to round, and also the style seems a bit unfinished and requires more work.
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Β I'd recommend, sketching out some stick men figures before you start and then draw a-top that so you can get the proportions right. And to make the breasts look better, try instead of making them oddly huge. Make wrinkles in the clothing to show the roundness of them, that works better.
4. layout. I had to read this comic several times before I understood what was happening. It was mostly the first 2 panels that confused me.Β
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my advice is to put little numbers in the corners so you can see what box comes first. Other then that it's fine.
This is just what I noticed and I am only saying this to help you out, I am not trying to put you down in anyway. I respect you and your work greatly, I just wanna help it along.
If I over-stepped I apologize.Β
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I have to be honest, you kinda did overstep
As for Optimus's "bra" you prefer to, no it is not a bra, it is an under shirt (most bra straps are not that thick usually).
I did add numbers on the corners of each page (I just made them kinda invisible looking, for that I don't want them to stand out). And I DID use stick figure looking things to sketch them out.
So, I get it that it's not perfect, I understand. But I worked REALLY hard on those and I'm using an iPad for them
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I apologize for sounding rude. I did not see the numbers until much later when I was looking at the images . I am sorry, I did not mean to insult your art, everything I said was purely to help you.
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No, you're fine
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no, I was harsh, I have no right to say so much like that. I was inconsiderate to your feelings....
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Hey, again, it's alright ^^ you didn't know ^^
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Hey, really, don't worry about it ^^Β
How were you recently? ^^
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Very well thank you, I've started Β new "Ask Optimus Pony" Blog and it's been keeping me busy! XD And you?
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Well, just to keep myself sane, I'm watching TFP every Saturday until the Predacon film is released (normally on DVD, but I may watch all season 3 in one day I could LOL). And after watching the episodes, I ask whoever is reading my journals to tell me their favorite moments and scene from the certain episodes I watched ^^ the most discussed moment/scene will be drawn in the form you saw on the pic you commented (as an example). Either it would've been in comic form or in a regular pic ^^
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Hmm, interesting, I haven't been keeping up with everyone's journals lately, got to read those more...and I am also watching tfp as much as I can, it makes me sad a bit, Now the series is over I kinda feel like I've lost my friends. Ratchet...Bee...arecee, prime, even the humans grew on me after a while.Β
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I don't think "lost" is the right word. Definately missing them is probably the right way to say it. Sure we won't see anymore new episodes. However, you still remember them. So, you really did not lose them ^^ I am quite curious about the new show coming up ^^ and Transformers 4 as well XD
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me to, the show definitely, the movie, not so much...
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Well, that's alright ^^ either way, I'm really excited XD
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XD i'll go watch it but i won't have my hopes high
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I get where you're coming from, I was more careful about it when Reveng of the Fallen was released
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true, dark of the moon was better then the second, but still not as good as the first.
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In a way, that's true ^^ Still kinda excited to see the 4th film ^^
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what can I say, Transformers, on Big screen. Heck yes.
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Ratchet scared in this scene...
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You mean ratchet scared you?
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No problem at all.
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I LOVE the coloring. 
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Thanx XD Gotta love the shiny XD
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Dang, this is really good OuO nice job! Ratchet and Prime's expressions areΒ perfect! I think my favorite panel would be Prime in the last panel
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Thank you ^^ I agree with you on the last panel XD I always loved the grinding teeth from prime
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Very nice. I have a real sudden want to add the speech bubbles in myself...Β
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Thanx ^^Β
Well, I didn't add them for a reason
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I get your point. But Ill try.
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ya... i now see how awkward that was... ._.
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Did you try to do it?
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na. Its better the way it is. And I can't get to my drawing program at the moment...
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Oh ok ^^ that's fine then ^^
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Ohmygosh!! I never thought of gender-swapping Ratchet! 
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That's all so brilliant. I adore Ratch's expression in frame 5.
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