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moonjava — Becoming the Trees
Published: 2004-05-16 16:57:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 88; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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Description dreaded hair in wavy
mist, panchromatic irises
bound dreams, dewy
henna Earth-toned love
rolling in the grass, acid
guitar, through the soul
who'd have thought things'd
turn this way?  (well they didn't)
When we become the
trees.  Redwood breath in the early morning
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Comments: 3

moonjava [2004-05-19 02:35:51 +0000 UTC]

okay first, what are line breaks? and don't read words connecting necessarily, some fit together weirdly xdragonmasterdude. but yeahhh generally my stuff is weird haha

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xdragonmasterx [2004-05-16 17:15:55 +0000 UTC]

yeah, very confusing, hard to understand the message

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BarbaraTamsin [2004-05-16 17:00:56 +0000 UTC]

very... TS Elliot. Only different.

I personally would've put line breaks instead of commas in this. I wonder why you choose otherwise....

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