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Published: 2008-08-09 09:18:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 397; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 9
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MEEEEEEEERelated content
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P.P.S. That pole works very well to shift attention to the right. forget to mention that earlier.
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P.S. Don't smoke. It's gross and it's bad for you.
...or ignore me (<- I bet you'll pick that one)
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I can't write formal critiques because I don't have a premium membership, but here's what I have to say:
Compositionally speaking, this is interesting. The pastel and warm tones in the background contrast nicely with the cools in the concrete and metal behind you, and the perspective in the buildings gives the piece a sense of movement. Unfortunately, that movement is disrupted. You're standing too far center frame (which is compositionally poor in itself), and your body cuts of that focus that the perspective gives you RIGHT in the middle. If your body was a little more to the right, the perspective of the buildings would draw the viewer straight to your head, which (I assume) is the focal point of your piece. I would also like to point out that your outfit blends in with the wall behind you. The white is lacking completely in color (obviously) so it blends in with the grey, and it's bright, so it blends with the background. Something dark and earthy, like an olive green with some lighter green highlights, would have done well in place of that white tee, and would have complimented your brown shorts well. Were it possible, I would have also suggested lowering that wall to show the brighter colors of the city a bit more instead of that dreadful grey. It's interesting for creating a contrast, but there's so much here that it takes over the picture, and it doesn't serve you well.
That's my critique.
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