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Nullibicity — comets in my head again
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There are bruises on my legs again.
Maybe I tried too hard for the stars - struck hemispheres of dreaming too big - while I count one, two, three, four, five shiners on my legs, ten lookers on each arm (your jointed peals of rage) and, probably, forty-four on my heart – though it’s not like I ever counted the number of times you beat me down, before.
It never did matter if I was enough for the 16 years - or for the Escitalopram - because I was never a star jumper that could trade in comets for the cratered, disfigured life of meteors.
There are bruises on my legs again, and I think I should stop dreaming.
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The words resonated with me. The thought, the reflection, the moment of contact on your flesh. To reflect is wisdom, to endure is bravery. Soft touches to your heart and soul. Butterfly kisses, If you will.
"Blue on Black"
I’m tired of walking on eggshells,
Every time that you’re around,
I’m tired of watching what I say or do,
Trying so hard not to make a sound.
I’m tired of being your punching bag,
Whenever we start to fight,
I’m tired of all the names you call me,
You won’t let me leave, but scream
for me to get out of your sight.
I'm sick to death of being afraid of you,
Of all the mean things you say and do,
I’m sick to death of feeling empty and used,
I’m so ashamed and embarrassed of being bruised.
I’m tired of all the broken promises
And all the lies-
“Boom!”
Now you got what you deserved…
A Bullet between the eyes!
-Kelly.
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognitions) in a news article that can be found here: Daily Lit Recognition for December 31st, 2014 . Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by 
Keep writing and keep creating.
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Thank you so very much. I am so grateful!!
Keep going strong, team! You're wonderful!
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The visuals and metaphors are great. I think that the last line is plenty powerful enough.
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I'm so very glad to hear you think so. Thank you!
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Your fantastic work has been featured here !
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love you're writings they're all so amazing and this one definitely is no exception! Great work
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Oh my goodness!
Your words always make me feel so fantastic. Thank you so very, very much for always taking the time out of your day to leave me such uplifting and encouraging sentiments! It's so deeply appreciated 
Have a lovely day!
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You're welcome! I'm glad I can help so much
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Thank you so much for all of the encouragement and praise! 
Have a fantastic day! You deserve it!
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Hehe aww XD
Hehe that's great to know . Again glad I can help ya
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I really love this piece. I love how you had a lot of astrological references in it. Overall, a wonderful piece. It made me want to see more of your work.
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Your comment just made my day! Really! Thank you so very, very much! I'm honored to receive such uplifting, thoughtful, and encouraging words! You truly are a lovely soul.
I appreciate the watch as well! More than words!
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Thanks, darling. 
I'm happy that my opinion could brighten your day. I'm sure that you will continue to amaze me with your work
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You're most definitely welcome!
It really did! I appreciated it c: and I thank you for being so optimistic about my work. I really will try my best!
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(Not trying to pressure or anything. I just think you'll do well )
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Thanks for all of your encouragement!! It truly does my heart wonders!
I hope to get back to writing really soon!
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Wow. This is amazing. I mean really amazing! It absolutly shook me, as if you were implying that I, the reader, should stop dreaming with that last sentence. It holds an incredibly stong impact for me, and it actually feels nice to read prose like this. Thank you, love.
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Hey, you~ It's so fantastic to hear from you, and I was so wonderfully surprised! I hope you've been well
Now to your comment: thank you so much for writing me something so wonderful! I always enjoy reading how my words impacted others!! It's just such a pleasure. Hearing people liked it is just a gift, as well! Thank you so very much! I thought it was interesting how you seemed to feel that the last line was aimed at you! That was deliciously thought-provoking, and I'm so happy to have this perspective. I'm really glad that it seemed to engage the reader in that way: I was kind of worried it was too personal, so no one would really find it relatable or enjoyable? I'm glad to be proven wrong by you, though. You're just marvelous. Thank you!
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I'm so sorry I haven't been commenting much, I'm having an apathetic spell of wallowing in self-disappointment and -doubt, but hopefuly it's going away now. Your prose was just so fantastic, I couldn't bring myself to not commend you on it!
It's nice to hear how my appreciation of your work makes you so happy! I think that, with the way it was written, it's very personal, but in a way that would let many readers be able to understand and easily be able to relate to it. You're just such a skilled writer, I don't think it would be possible for you to create amateur literature.
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the "and i think i should stop dreaming" was incredibly impactful to myself, a dreamer. I think that part should stay
couldn't find any weak spots apparent through one reading.
It flows well, and I think this could fall in both poetry AND prose, so i think that part is all up to you
Have a great day, thankyou for gracing us small time artists with your beautiful art.
~H
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I'm super happy that the ending did impact you well! I was kind of worried about it. I've just never been gifted at ending my written work... so dare I say, that this is the first piece I've actually ended successfully?
Thank you for always being so wonderfully honest. I am so grateful!
Your compliment is just so lovely, too. I'm amazed people can think of my thoughts as beautiful. It just means a lot! I'm glad I seem to be progressing. Thank you, again!
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I think most of your endings seem sucessful from my point of view
You're welcome, but it's only right to post honest opinions when people pour their heart in soul into their art forms and put it here for the world to see.
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I can somewhat relate to the features in the prose extract as being the emotions of disillusionment - as suggested in the multitudes of bruises incurred in the vain attempt to reach for stars. Possibly, those cosmic satellites represent the dreams or goals unachievable, beyond our feeble reach? Nonetheless, it is a well-written prose script, and the brevity of the final sentence in contrast to the bulk of the center paragraph actually works quite suitably - I approve
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Hey there.
Wow, for your very first prose, this is beautiful!
If you'd like to make a more visual impact, perhaps use the different typing styles they have on dA?
For example, writing the sentence in Bold could help? or even italics?
If you're not sure how, just let me know and I can write it out
The only weak spot is your confidence, dear. Please believe me when I say this is a very well-written and impactful piece.
If the sentence "It never mattered" is bothering you a bit, perhaps "It never did matter" would be a preferable change?
I hope that inspires you somewhat
This is perfect in prose form, rest assured
So I hope this helps, and the very best of luck with your "real-life" endeavours.
They say a shrink always had their own shrink, so just know I'm always here to talk to
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Oh my. You are fantastic! Thank you so very much for taking the time to write me such a thoughtful and lovely comment!
I just really appreciate you right now! Your words are incredibly helpful, and I am so grateful to receive such wonderful words of praise! Thank you, also, for the invitation. Sometimes I get quite overwhelmed, and sometimes I'm just a crybaby. If I ever need to talk to someone, though, I will be sure to contact you! Thanks. May I extend the same invitation to you? I don't know how much I'll particularly be able to help, but I really do love to listen - just something to keep in mind, should you ever need to vent, rant, etc.
Thanks, again, lovely!
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Hey, no problem!
It's one thing to comment some critique, but it's lovely to see that you value my opinion and took time in answering. Thank you!
Please don't feel like you need to make any particular changes to your work because of my comments. My only intentions are to ispire you to continue practicing and perfecting your clear talent :')
Haha, everybody can get a bit mopy sometimes, so go ahead and vent out whenever you feel like it!
I'm right here, and I really appreciate that you're there for me, too!
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It is completely my pleasure! I just really appreciate the people who are trying to help me grow. I really desire that, and it's so fantastic and touching to see someone willing to take time out of their day to help.
Oh, please! Your suggestions were lovely! I usually weigh each option anyway, and I see if it sounds better with or without, etc. Your critique was really thought out, though, and you provided reasons and how the original thing impacted you... I'm grateful!
Thank you for the wonderful compliment, as well! You are too kind to me 
Aw, thank you! I will be sure to do that. You too! Just if you ever feel like it. It's always just wonderful to have a support system, and I'd really like if it weren't one sided. However, if you never really encounter a problem that you feel can be told to a complete stranger, then that's fine, too. Just know I'd like to be there for you, too, where I am able! thanks for being so lovely!
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So glad you appreciate the comments
It's attentive artists like you who make critiquing and commenting worthwhile!
I've added you to my watch, cause I'd love to see more of your work, and threw in a llama, as you are the nicest deviant I have met since I started! (well, 'cept my other half, of course 
I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future, and if you have any niggling problems, don't hesitate
I can't promise to be on dA every day, but when I am I'll be sure to answer your comments/chat with as much thought put in as I can!
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Kelsey, this is a beautiful piece of prose! It comes off as very poetic-like, almost like it's 'proserty' and I love it so much. The last sentence blew me away.
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Gah!
I am so very happy and honored to hear you say such words! I'm incredibly grateful to be receiving them! You always help a lot, and to hear you say that you liked this piece, and that you thought it was beautiful... that just really makes me smile! Thanks for being so wonderful. Your words mean the world to me~
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"I think I should stop dreaming" gives it a finality, but also a tone that leads one to ponder it further.
I didn't feel there were any weak spots at all.
There wasn't any disjointed flow because in the end, it all came back to the central theme.
It could be in poetry form if you really wanted it to be, or you could leave it like this and call it "prosetry", as it seems all the hip youngun's are doing these days.
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to answer my questions!
Your words were just so lovely, and I'm happy that the last line really tied everything up - normally, I'm not too good with endings, but I've been practicing! I'm so happy it seemed to work okay for this piece
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Love the astronomy metaphors Sunflower, and I have to say, i've never seen Escitalopram used in prose before!
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I just love seeing that nickname 
I always appreciate your comments, so thank you, again~ <3
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My pleasure!
Sure you're not the only one who enjoyed it
How's the roadtrip going Sunflower?
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Eh, interestingly?
I keep skipping days just because crap happens. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things! It just takes me forever to do one person (it usually takes about two hours a deviant, depending on how much their words impacted me and in what way, etc), so sometimes it's also hard to stay motivated. I'll keep trying my best, though! I'm getting through people, and I plan to make sure everyone gets the feedback they deserve
I just hope that no one will become too angry with the fact that I'm now starting to take forever. I really do desire to get to everyone, though! Perhaps I shall try harder. Thank you for asking and for caring! I don't know if I've told you this before, but I quite adore you! <3
How are things going with you?
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No worries Sunflower, just take as long as ya need, no one'll get annoyed; this is DeviantArt after all! We're all stressed, broken and batty here! We're artists! Whatcha expect? A good life comes with challenges! Everyone's in the same boat, which is why we're all so pleased (and, admittedly, impressed) that you're doing this. For you to spend two hours on each one is above and beyond a duty that wasn't yours in the first place!
Keep on chuggin', no rush m'hearty
Aw, thanks for asking :')
Well i've been to hospital recently, nothing serious, and Mum and Brother were in a crash, again just cosmetic damage to them but was bit stress-filled. But yesterday I found some music I love so s'all's good in the world of me
Not sure whether I made this clear last time, but I owe you a very
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My god. I JUST LOVE YOU
Wow. I never really thought about it like that, but I think you make an incredibly valid point! Thanks for giving me such perspective! Sometimes I feel pathetic for how many obstacles I seem to let obstruct my path, but it's actually incredibly comforting to know I'm not the only one. While I may let too many things hinder me, I just love how supportive everyone is here, and that they can forgive me. You, yourself, are just such a lovely soul. I'm so pleased to have met you, and I'm grateful! I'd really like to get to know you further, if you're okay with that? Everyone likes to become friends differently, but I do enjoy notes, Skype (though I'm an incredibly awkward person, lol, but I hope it sometimes puts people at ease?), and just conversations such as these. If you would like to become better acquainted, I guess! I don't want to do anything you are uncomfortable with!
Carrot! Oh my lord. I am so incredibly sorry! That... I just am tearing up right now! Is everyone really okay? Are YOU okay? That's horrible. I really want you to all be okay. Please take care of yourself, okay? Like, I know you probably do already, but please remember to take the proper time to recover! I want you to be all healthy and happy and just your resilient, beautiful self. Please know my best wishes are extending to you and your family! My god. That must have been horribly stressful and upsetting to experience! I know that sometimes I can't always help, but please know that I'm always here to listen. If you ever need to talk, I would love nothing more than to hear about the things that are bothering you. Or even the things that are making your day wonderful! Maybe it's weird to say this, but when I talk to you, my heart swells with such love! Whatever you need, okay? I'm here, if you want!
I'm happy to hear you found some good music, though! That's wonderful! I just love music. It's so inspiring and heartwarming. If you find any particular gems, and if you'd like to share, I'm pretty much into all genres of music and would love a few recommendations... if the mood ever arises in you to give some!
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Oh Sunflower! The sheer size of your replies is worth a DD in itself! The weight they carry, in both emotion and sentiment is astonishing! 
If you ever feel anything akin to desperation, depression or dejection, there are "27 million registered artists and art appreciators", God knows how many people doing your poetry club and one me, all of whom are more than happy to share pain and spread the joy! I've yet to meet any Deviant who is anything other than polite, friendly and intelligent; although you seem to surpass them in all these qualities and with a pinch of...well more like a handful of adorableness that just makes me wanna hug ya 'til you get bored of me!
I would LOVE to get to know you!
Music's a personal thing; it doesn't show mood, taste or personality, it is more the sound of the soul (oooo, I like that, must remember it). It is a snapshot of their very being! Once I begin to see yours, i'll send a suggestion or two
Aye, we're all safe and sound, just a bit wobbly for the moment; much appreciated though Sunflower, means a lot!
Aw, you're too kind! If I am as you say, then it's only through the encouragement and support of beautiful people such as yourself, so THANK YOU!
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I would never ever get bored of you. Never. Can't see it happening! Especially with your wonderful words! You just lift my day up!!! You infect me with optimism, and I am so appreciative and grateful for that! Sometimes I just need to be reminded to smile! Thank you so very much for caring and for being so lovely! My words will never work, either, in portraying how much that means so me.
ETERNAL HUG? (there should really be an emote for that
FRIENDS! Definitely. I wouldn't be happy any other way 
You put it perfectly! I couldn't have said it better myself! I really do believe that music speaks one's soul. It means a lot, too, that you'd put such weight to which ones you send. I just love that. I will await them with such love and care! Please take your time, though, and please know that if you forget, I'm completely fine with that! just the thought itself is enough for me!
I'm just so happy to hear this. Thank god. I hope all continues to go well. I really do. Please, as I said, feel free to let me know if something is bugging you! I really do love to listen 
YOU'RE MOST WELCOME! to be truthful, I'm only the way I am, and I've only come as far as I have, through lovelies such as yourself, too. So I shall thank you too. It just does my heart wonders to have such inspirational people surrounding me!
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I FORGOT TO TELL YOU! IMMA GOING AWAY FOR A WEEK TOMORROW!
You gotta reply so I can say bye!
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Gah! Well have super loads of fun!!!!
I'M JEALOUS! '^' but I'll be going somewhere kind of interesting on the 9th? Maybe. It's still not decided.
Anyway! I hope you have a blast! Get your daily dose of awesomeness, and don't forget to smile! I'm sure it'll be an awesome trip (: or at least, I hope it is!
Farewell Carrot!!! Make lots of memories!
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Sharn't be long only a week! Shall tell you all about my adventures when I get back
Haven't got long, but since you seem so eager to know, Oregon isn't high on my Uni list ('cos it's a few thousand miles away) but i'll be sure to visit if i'm ever in the country!
In a bizzle my dearest shizzle!
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I. Just. Love. You.
You're so quirky and fun! Please know I'll always be your number one fan v-v
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You're such a happy person! It's so refreshing to read
You're the sweetest!!! I get excited whenever I see your reply!
FRIENDS FOR EVAH??
You're so very understanding! Introverted and proud, that's us. See whatcha think of this :www.youtube.com/watch?v=JGCsys... hope you like it.
We're all doing splendidly thanks! Off for summer so plenty of time to chill out and recoop!
Once again, fanks for just bein' you!
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Haha. Words tend to do that! It's so awkward sometimes. I spoke the word "spoon" aloud (I can't remember why) too much, and then I was like "THIS IS SUCH A WEIRD WORD! IT SOUNDS LIKE GIBBERISH" and I was just astounded that anyone could ever call a spoon, well, a spoon.
Awww, thank you! That really makes me smile!
As for your big hug... it kinda oooks like a ninja hug!
FO EVA AND EVA!
I actually loved it!!! Thank you so very much for sharing! It was such an engaging video!! Truly! I just was so happy to watch her and her shadow dance, and I thought it was really fun! The music itself was really upbeat and bouncy, that I had to tap my foot along to the eighth notes anyway 
I'm so glad to hear that! I hope everyone continues to just take it easy and get better. I mean, you've all been through a lot.
To hear someone say that actually just makes my day. Oh goodness. Thank you! I've always felt weird sometimes, but to have someone appreciate this personality of mine... it just makes me want to love you FOREVERRRRR! But really: thank you! I'm grateful for your words. Thank you for being so kind and nice!
(sorry for any spelling errors, and I'm sure there's a ton: My deviantART messages must be weird. Once I get over a certain length, this white box just pops out and covers the preview button, so I can't spell check. Hm. Oh well. I hope none are too terribly bad!)
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