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Published: 2004-03-06 00:40:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 135; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 29
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Description The room shuddered. Not with movement and sound. But with the light. Bulbs, fluttering with uncertainty. In the corner, left back, speakers tried to liberate sound. Gifts from when I first moved in, tiny folds of foam pulsing with fuzzing bass, begging to be upgraded. Next, I promised them, they would be.

In the hallway a chair scrapped. I’d put that there to hide the mess. Maybe someone spotted it. I would have to move it again later, when they’d finished with their version of the problem.

I sat.
I watched the light swing and splutter outside. It had been doing it for nights now. I called the landlady. Apparently people had complained before. So I sat and waited for it to be fixed.

I walk to the door. Looking through the peep hole I can see him. Standing. He is just like I remember. I wonder if he feels the same too. I would invite him in, i could swing the door open a little and ask. But he wouldn't hear. So i watch him turn to leave, swollen boards, cracked glass, unsteady light moving with him.

Behind me a window rattles. I left it ajar, for him to seep in. If he wanted. So, tonight, maybe he does.

And that chair, just out of vision… I’ve have to sort that later. I think i can see someone standing nose to nose with me behind this door. I think. the warped vision of that tiny view wouldn't let me know.

I nudge the door close and turn to the window.

The window of room 78.
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Comments: 5

fleeet [2004-12-20 23:24:01 +0000 UTC]

The power of this piece comes from the sound of the words. As soon as I started reading this I went back to the beginning and spoke it aloud. In doing so it began to resonate in my mind. It became more than simply text on the page.

It became a confession of an addict. But a confession of somebody who in certainly not ashamed of her addiction and craves more. It has a James Joyce stream of conscious feel to it. The sentences are coupled via the mind, not the fingers. It is why it has more passion through its voice. When spoken the tongue connects them in ways the eyes cannot. You can feel her very longing for the man of room 78.

But sadly she is longing for something that she is unsure will come to her. As such she does what anyone else would do, tries to focus on other things around her. They all, like anyone with an addiction, eventually swing back around to her desire; the rattling window becoming his entry way to her. It all goes back to him and her longing.

Its striking, empowering and most importantly I think we all can relate to this.

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undulate [2004-03-18 20:54:30 +0000 UTC]

"Behind me a window rattles. I left it ajar, for him to seep in. If he wanted. So, tonight, maybe he does. "

^ insanely good.

i love this. it's so lonely and a little psychotic. totally wonderful.

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ChibiBubblegum [2004-03-06 15:58:52 +0000 UTC]

you have incredible skill in demonstrating
events-ideas-images with words
I am taken away.
It isn't often that I take the time to read litature pieces,
but yours are wonderful

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orangetot [2004-03-06 11:10:26 +0000 UTC]

Ok, yeah, so i get why you dont like this.
but with any luck, you dont mind.
And hopefully, you are happy with its mood - fitting with yours in your piece.

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ost2life [2004-03-06 10:23:58 +0000 UTC]

i so want to take it personally and think good things but I dont, instead I've spent the past hour trying to comment.

it's very very good.

*sneeze*

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