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Published: 2008-03-01 16:47:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 2056; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 19
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spring haiku-a-thon1. for denise
nose touching soft skin
drinking deep; erotic taste
do I smell perfume?
2. the reality of seasons
police sirens scream
a shooting down on broad street
springtime in philly
3. not from around here
explaining to an
out-of-towner what the fuck
is a mummers parade
4. the color red
lasting impression
crimson contrasts against white
lipstick on my collar
5. a frown at father time
admiring dusk
hours hasten onto dawn
nights grow short again
6. hard to write with it
skilled bladesman; sharp steel
sheath conceals the poet's pen
a martial artist
7. good evening, philadelphia
skyline horizon
sunset paints the canvas red
glowing city lights
8. solitary dining
candlelight and wine
rose petals and fine linen
she never arrives
9. unreliable meteorologist
spring ahead once more
no shadow for the groundhog
meanwhile, more snow falls
10. poetic distractions
words upon a page
paragraphs give birth to tales
busy writing prose
11. solitary poet
grasping for embers
hands clutching tendrils of smoke
the spectre of you
12. searching for warmth
restless dreamer wakes
hand slides across a pillow
nobody lies there
13. the forecast for tonight
drumming against glass
beats upon a window pane
rain taps out a tune
14. a daily lullaby
sound breaks the silence
steady pulse of cars and men
as the city wakes
15. in like a lion
schizophrenic month
first cold, then warm, then rainy
must be march again
16. a shared chuckle
scandalous rumors
glancing at another girl
a wink between friends
17. a deadly encounter
shiver down your spine
skin prickles under warm breath
a predator's kiss
18. not as glamorous as it seems
number endless days
ticking clock; no need to wind
immortality
19. what do march showers bring?
haven't seen the moon
eyes drift upward, rain falls down
dreary city streets
20. cigarette not included
artificial smoke
steam rises from parted lips
springtime commences
21. winter in the heart
melancholy wind
breeze blows past an old park bench
he sits there alone
22. a passage through time
empty corridors
stranger travels through the door
to fields of regret
23. to whatever god will listen
candle light within
a church symbolizes hope
day of renewal
24. musing upon haiku
blank piece of paper
words interplay with feelings
writing poetry
25. staying warm through the cold
hand upon my chest
body lying atop mine
my favorite blanket
26. catching up with you
morning of regret
nights full of wine and roses
bloody hangover
27. bah, distractions
impeded progress
real life prevents artistry
a late submission
28. scenes from fairmount park
diligent jogger
grace meets its mortal foe
tripped over a rock
29. dining with sharp teeth
sweeter than brandy
rivulets run down cool flesh
crimson sacrifice
30. the blue-eyed girl, in brief
ponytails flying
little legs sprint down the path
childlike innocence
31. parting, such sweet sorrow
a final poem penned
days of counting syllables
now come to an end
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Comments: 302
Ah. Such a shame when people are petty like that.
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yeah it is, but I'm kind of glad because I was able to work for firefighters and learn a lot about it...
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I've known a few firefighters. Very colorful, yet lively, fellows.
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indeed.. one of the best year's work I did ever... if not the best.
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I've worked with some colorful people as well. Right now, it feels more like I'm a counselor and babysitter.
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lol, sounds like interesting work.
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It keeps me on my toes. Feet poised perilously close to the brink of insanity.
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Whomever labels the aristocrats as sophisticates have lied to us all. That's all I have to say about that.
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Different flavor, this. I love the urban voice and can't wait to see more. 
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Yes, definitely superfluous. Strange personal touches for a strange man, I guess you could say.
Thank you for the warm comment.
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Lipstick, indeed. And a bit of something more I am afraid. So lovely and revealing.
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Drat, did I let a little of the other form of crimson slip away? Such a messy eater sometimes.
Thank you, Denise.
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You're most welcome. I think. You missed some on your chin. Yep, right there.
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Damn. Thank you, Denise.
Can dress me up, but can't bloody well take me out anywhere.
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we love the second one.
it is wonderful.
solar
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I am glad you approve.
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love the Nietzsche quote too- what book is that from, do you know?
this seems a deep statement when taking into account the mysteries of the universe...
*thinking*
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I'm afraid I don't know. 
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Good job, I love how you aren't looking at typical haiku subjects or describing the usual romanticised view of spring. And you make the syllable count look effortless. I'm looking forward to more, good luck finishing!
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Thank you kindly; the favorite was much appreciated.
Early on, somebody told me it was best to be honest and personal with haiku. Ergo the subject matter. Am just not conjuring images of cherry blossoms or epic battles at the moment.
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ah, fantastic!
such a gorgeous form of poetry, and you do it so well.
It seems each of the three in here have one as thier favourite, pity I can't fave it thrice...
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One favorite was gift enough. Thank you kindly.
Must confess, I'm having fun with it. However, I can't quite seem to get on task with a springtime theme.
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Springtime is a time of nights becoming shorter once more, and therefore not the best of subjects for...the nocternally inclined, shall we say?
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Not in the slightest. I am not looking forward to summertime. My sleep schedule is shot to hell as it is.
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the only consolation is that the nights are warmer...not much use to us directly, but it does usually mean there is less clothing in the way, low-cut tops and whatnot...
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Mmm... lower neck lines. A reward in more ways than one to offset the shortened nights.
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I had never heard of a mummers parade, now I won't need to ask when I get to Philly! (I bet the most common question you get is, "where's a good Philly Cheese Steak?")
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Yes, I get asked quite a bit where the best places to dine are. South Street, in case you were wondering. And all tourists should go to Pat's in South Philly if they wish a cheesesteak.
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I'm going to keep this comment until I have it memorized, that way when I am in Philly I will just automatically say, "Let's go to Pat's."
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And just remember:
No swiss on the cheese steaks. Whiz is traditional. American is acceptable. Provolone is. . . passable. Swiss will have you chained to a fence at midnight in the darkest recesses of North Philly.
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but i love swiss cheese. o well, i don't see myself visiting Philly in the near future (unless there was some kind of 'we love Julie and Peter conference'
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What a spectacular conference. It would have to be held during the evening, though, I'm afraid.
Quite liked swiss once upon a time myself. However, the natives scoff at putting it upon their coveted cheesesteaks.
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do they have something against cheesecake? i love that stuff.
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Oh, heavens no, that would be sacrilege in the mortal world. Cheesecake is beloved amongst humans.
Was speaking of cheese steaks. Not the first time I've tripped somebody up making it a compound word.
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i know, but i started talking about cheesecake, since it sounds like cheesesteak.
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You'd want to go to New York for that. Much better cheesecake up there.
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No swiss, got it. I hear hanging by one's toenails is painful.
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Quite. Not that I have any experience in the matter.
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I personally liked the reference to spring in #2. It indicated that as life stirs after a long cold winter, so unfortunately does death.
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Such is how it is in Philadelphia.
Tried to incorporate spring, but am not feeling in a very springtime mood.
Write what you know, right?
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Of course... and occasionally, what we don't just for variety.
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A couple good poems to start with.
My co-workers in Philly tell me the same thing. Of course I work in Cleveland but a suburb so don't get that much around my way.
As for 5-7-5, the main thing I think about is 5-7-5 doesn't make it a haiku and not being 5-7-5 doesn't stop it from being a haiku when talking about those written in English. If the structure helps you, stick to it. I know it helped me focus when I started writing Haiku again. Now though I feel less constrained with the form and think I have written some really good poems.
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It's helped keep me within boundaries, but I may explore out of the box a bit here and there. I'm glad they've been decent so far.
Philly is non-stop action; no rest for the emergency rooms or police departments. Or coroners, for that matter. Life within the big city, right?
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I still enjoy your work, however i've never come accross this particular style before... i feel like a douche being someone who wrights a lot of poetry. However i may have been closed off and missed it somewhere whilst immersed in my book. Would you care to enlighten me?
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Wouldn't mind at all.
Here, perhaps this will help: [link]
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