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Pikaspirit In reply to ??? [2009-08-28 23:30:27 +0000 UTC]

That's okay.But I know much about the game since I already beat both Golden Sun and Golden Sun Lost Age,don't mind if you want to ask me about the game

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Pikaspirit In reply to GGY128 [2009-08-28 22:05:30 +0000 UTC]

fanfic?Um...you mean like a blog or something?

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Falchion1984 In reply to ??? [2009-08-28 19:53:30 +0000 UTC]

This is different than I had envisioned, but it is funnier. I really like the scenario you're presenting here, of Garet and Ivan trying to spill that Mia likes Isaac and getting iced (literally). I also love the way you drew the characters,; Mia in particular looks great, her clothes and expression are very well done. I'm guessing you used a screenshot from the game as a background, which makes sense. What I'm not sure of is whether or not it fits the scene. I'm trying to remember is Isaac wakes up after Colosso in a guest room or the Colosso barracks. If the later, this background is probably fine. Well, the only thing I'd suggest is taking a second look at Mia's speech. You've got a couple of typos there, but that's all. In any case, thanks so much for doing this for me and I'll review the others right away.

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Pikaspirit In reply to Falchion1984 [2009-08-28 21:55:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a bunch ^w^

Yeah,it's a screenshot and I thought it looks okay with this picture.Oh,there is?I'll check once more.Sometimes I just being careless ^w^

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Falchion1984 In reply to Pikaspirit [2009-08-28 22:09:37 +0000 UTC]

Here's a tip, read things you write aloud before submitting them. I catch typos and awkwards sentences more easily that way and it might work for you too. Well, thanks much and catch you later.

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Pikaspirit In reply to Falchion1984 [2009-08-28 22:11:12 +0000 UTC]

Oh...okay,thanks.

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Falchion1984 In reply to Pikaspirit [2009-08-28 22:57:03 +0000 UTC]

Glad to be of service.

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