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I think this is the best one I did beside the anime ranger one X3 Cynder vore for you all X3Related content
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hmm i cant beleve that I made that up just from thinking about it
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how do i k if they are spying on me?
-bring bring-
me: hello?
them: u cant -laughs evil-
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me: u want me to pay that much
APCOPY: yup
me: -thinking- i feel like they rip me off some how.
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2003456$
is the price
me:uhhh wat ...
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mac: access dinide
me: wat! why?
-sighs- so the apple compny come over and
looks at my mac and said
ok heres the bill.
me: you got to be kiding
me looking at the price of the bill
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all your comments is spam
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uh when did I speak or spamed on this pic?
And if this is long time ago I am sorry but Iv change and cleaned up my act
I am more respectful to other then I was before.
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i gust this profs how much my computer hates me
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lol awesime
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OMFG WTF HAX WHY SHOULD CYNDER DO THAT noob
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lol im sorry i have to let it out sometimes xD
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Didn't know what vore was until this.
I'm not a fanatic of vore, but I like looking at sequential art and storytelling in comic pages.
I like this one but I think you could of milked the gag a little further. Um.. that didn't sound right. 0_o
Okay, I know I'm late in the game as this art has been posted for some time but I would like to give a few tips.
The dragon being eaten look too relaxed like swallowing a dead body. You should have his arms more raised and tense in suprised reaction while in the middle of saying something like:
Panel One-
"Start with my feet so I can watch."
Panel Two-
*Eeep!*
Have him kicking his legs in Panel Three.
Reading the panels from left to right the 4th panel do feel misplaced interrupting the swallowing sequence.
I would make that 4th panel the last one after cynder's paunch belly and gratified speech leading to him inside responding with:
"Thanks, but I can only be eaten once!"
.. maybe better with a look of indifference on his face!
About lettering - currently your letters are traced too small.
I see you have plenty of empty real estate in your panels so don't be afraid to use bigger text and dialogue balloons else it won't reproduce well if the page were to be reduced for printing.
Also, try using big bold 3D styled text for emphasizing the sound f/x (GULP! SLURP!) and boarders to partition your panels to give it more flow and polish!
Your drawing skills are really great! Keep it up!
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heh, thank you for the advices ^^ the 3d styled text idea sounds great, I'll keep it in mind ^^ anyway, this was just supposed to be a quick drawing, so I didn't put full effort into it ^^ thank you for the critique though, it's highly appreciated, seriously! ^^
it'll be useful for my actual serious comics X3
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Your welcome.
The drawing part I find is always easier as compared to storytelling, the later is more important to master though; that's what's so great about cartooning!
Yay! Who need's DA's lousy critique feature which non-subscribers aren't allowed to use. Hence I use the comments thread to post my input instead.
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uh this is kinda weird, but i guess its cool too.
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very nice! wish i could draw like this
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You may want to check this out. This guy's plagiarizing your picture.
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hahaha thats totaly evil cynder 
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