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I forgot to mention the Blue Blood !!! D:
It's a mystery! Is it because she is actually part of the nobility? Is it just because the high calory level and strange thickness of her blood simply affects it's color? Is it because she's the one who makes the diapers and tampax ads ? MYSTERY!

(... also, yeah, unlike Olga, Olenka's blood is not chocolate, just some very sweet tasting liquid, and she doesn't reach the Plasma-grade heat her grandchildren will have, she just reach around 100 celcius)


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This is it, Page one to nine for the



Olenka (mine) vs Shakka (~TheVentra )

IMPORTANT

- It is finished. It is open-ended for a reason. I originally planned to make a finale with Miss Kurori (~TheCrowchan ) and some customer (potentially Foi (*dire-musaera ) and the triangle joke ( a la RE4 cinematic ) But I voted out of it, instead here is the plan :

------ Letting it open ended for other people to have fun with a dude falling at high speed xD

Fun Facts

- The first 5 hours of working on this entry were used to design Shakka in my style.
- There is no ''triangle'' in my entry for a simple reason... it's panel was cut out in the end xD
- This took about 2x longer than my endzone animated entries, and was actually more fun.
- This is my second serious attempt at a comic strip, check my scraps for my other one (two years old)
- This is my first long-winded personnal project that I actually brought to completion, and enjoyed from A to Z.
- I'm totally in trouble and late in school now xD
- Well since it's one of my first comic there's alot of beginner's mistakes but hey, gotta learn at some point.
- Pretty much the only project I ever started early and finished waaaay before the deadline ... ever xD Was really fun actually.


Enjoy the battle and give me your comments!

This entry also doubles-up as a style exploration for my 2D animated short OMGWTFBBQ Z


The mistakes in the entry
I hope this won't come as a liability to my entry, but I'll also point out the mistakes I know I did.

-Shakka switches his hand-bearing sword from left to right during the second slash... I noticed only too late.
-Olenka's design changes so much from panel to panel, unlike Shakka, it's design was pretty much a first draft and I often forgotten small parts. Heck, at some point I had forgotten her friggin SKIRT (well... the thing that kinda looks like half a skirt) though I noticed on time to correct it. The skulls in her hair werent so lucky.
-The panel were Shakka jumps on the boat on 3rd page... it's a big 2/3 of a page picture but it was 2 AM when I did it and I really regret it... so... stiff... and ... well not dynamic.


I'll let the rest to people who want to criticize = P

ENJOY!
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Comments: 100

AngelCrusher In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 16:16:13 +0000 UTC]

ace comic! i like the colour style of it too.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to AngelCrusher [2007-11-20 17:32:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks dood

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Adrian-MalSeraph In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 14:12:16 +0000 UTC]

Good overall.

The pacing was kind of funky at the point where the guy jumps up to meet your character. Maybe establishing the jump would've made that part flow a bit better.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Adrian-MalSeraph [2007-11-20 17:35:26 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I tought about that jump anticipation, but I didin't manage to make it look good, so I cut it out as it still worked without it. Thanks.

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Adrian-MalSeraph In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-20 19:19:05 +0000 UTC]

Yup!

Hey, I'm doing it now too. (I've already drawn up the character, just need to color it and put it on the background)

I will see you on the field of battle!

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dead-arch In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 14:05:32 +0000 UTC]

Dude... that friggin cameltoe looks way too much like a buttcrack. It's just... too much. Did I said "too much"?

Next... I just can't wait for the day you'll finally do REAL colorations. Your style just scream "FLASHY SATURATED COLORS" but what we see there is the opposite.

I know it's only some kind of "filler" because you don't have the time (or will or both) to do a full color job, but you must find a way to make this more appealing. Opposed to someone with equivalent drawing and comicking skills, maybe I'd vote for the other guy even if it'd be some default black & white.

You nailed down your drawing style, you got your name written all over it, it's your own (as far as I'm concerned). You know what to do next. Put some sugar coating on that cake, god dammit. >= D

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Sebbythefreak In reply to dead-arch [2007-11-20 17:34:03 +0000 UTC]

I actually had the time and that's what I decided to do with the time >= (

I'm still experimenting dude, it's not ''found'' yet. It's not filler.



Maybe her vagina is THAT big

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dead-arch In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-21 00:25:48 +0000 UTC]

Well, if I'm not mistaken, it's not the first time I see you using this type of colouring... or at least something very similar. Now sure it does look better than before, but that's because of the neat drawings.

Then FIND something or else I'll keep calling it "filler" cuz I'm a mean motherfucker >= D

Anyway, you have the ability to improve fast, nearly exponentialy, so just fire the missiles!

Also...

...NO. It just... can't... I mean... you can't do... gnnnnnn*dies... and explodes*

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RoninsUltramix In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 12:05:28 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha! Fun and just action packed, you got my vote! But then again im not the judge.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to RoninsUltramix [2007-11-20 12:29:15 +0000 UTC]

Hehehehehe it's still pretty encouraging ! Thanks man = D

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Overheal1987 [2007-11-20 09:37:52 +0000 UTC]

at the first couple attacks it was hard to tell what was going on, who was slashing who but it was worth it to see such shots as "CROTCHED...". Actually I liked the way you drew the slashes from trailing out of the frame - t'was a nice touch.

I'd join this thing but I cant do cartoon people and action is a grey area for me. Also, I have Steel Nation and college to concern myself with

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Overheal1987 [2007-11-20 12:28:56 +0000 UTC]

He's actully slashing the panel itself in that one.

Thanks! And good luck = D

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Guyren [2007-11-20 08:50:17 +0000 UTC]

Ridiculously enjoyable

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Guyren [2007-11-20 12:28:21 +0000 UTC]

My my! Thank you!

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NyxNocturne In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 06:51:17 +0000 UTC]

i think you should win based on your drawing style alone

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Sebbythefreak In reply to NyxNocturne [2007-11-20 12:28:04 +0000 UTC]

Hahahaha thank you!

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dire-musaera In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 05:30:07 +0000 UTC]

a fav for stylistic excellence, good pacing, and clear story telling.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to dire-musaera [2007-11-20 12:27:46 +0000 UTC]

= D Thank you very much! Very encouraging!

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Mul In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 05:20:57 +0000 UTC]

She bleeds blue chocolate? D:

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Mul [2007-11-20 05:26:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for reminding me I forgot to put that part in the "stuff to notice" section...


It's actually blue blood, referring to both the nickname of nobility (blue bloods) and well... yeah that it's just a freaky color that could explain why it tastes different.

Since SDL is more "realistic" she can't bleed actual chocolate. (Also, she just reach 100 or so degrees celcius, instead of the thousands of celcius plasma-uterus her grandgrandgrandgrandgrand(etc)child has)

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Mul In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-20 06:31:02 +0000 UTC]

And what's with the random loveheart? D:

I'm sorry for being clueless. : /

(Fight El Loco next!)

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Mul [2007-11-20 12:27:57 +0000 UTC]

She's getting aroused

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Mul In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-21 03:48:10 +0000 UTC]

Arousal = CROTCH'D

Good to remember when El Loco steps into the ring. (Hopefully. )

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Holy-Titan In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 05:20:44 +0000 UTC]

wow, i love your style, its simplistic and fresh, i love how u got the atmosphere down to where u didnt need to really draw a background but everyone knew where they were, i could learn from this

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Holy-Titan [2007-11-20 05:24:18 +0000 UTC]

Hehehe thanks, little tricks I learnt by complety hating drawing backgrounds xD

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vantn In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 05:01:37 +0000 UTC]

the crotch his should have killed him....otherwise this is good, i wonder what your next peice will be like?

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Sebbythefreak In reply to vantn [2007-11-20 05:07:14 +0000 UTC]

Let's hope it'll be even better = )

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FeatherDragoon In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 04:02:00 +0000 UTC]

Neat. Once I get the time and patience, I'll further examine your style. It looks like a more dynamic kind of technique one would develope from a ballpoint bic pen in highschool doodles, very angular and heavy lines. All the same, that is probably why I like it like I do.
Props on Olga for the take-out move. It's good to know your own ship like that. ^0-

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Sebbythefreak In reply to FeatherDragoon [2007-11-20 05:06:42 +0000 UTC]

She broke her own ship for the sake of that move xD

Thanks man. Was a nice comment = )

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lawsae In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 03:12:26 +0000 UTC]

Man i love your style, Great work as always. I would love to fight your girl some time.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to lawsae [2007-11-20 05:07:26 +0000 UTC]

Thanks dood,

and sure = D why not

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frankperrin In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 03:05:51 +0000 UTC]

Pas mal kickass comme strip.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to frankperrin [2007-11-20 05:05:46 +0000 UTC]

Merci = D

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MysteryMan91 In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 01:50:02 +0000 UTC]

NICE.
That was amazing. XD
"CROTCH'D"

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Sebbythefreak In reply to MysteryMan91 [2007-11-20 02:17:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks man = )

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Unknown-person In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 01:37:16 +0000 UTC]

hahah. That medieval Olga is so adorable. Sincerely, if you haven't told about the little parts that you forgot, I wouldn't notice x) I think the panelling flows quite well and it's impressive how much I can imagine it animated, the poses, the dynamism... maybe it's just me, haha, but I think it looks great anyways. Very action-ish.

The sounds effects are still my favorite, though. That's a very loud smash noise xD

See ya

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Unknown-person [2007-11-20 02:24:50 +0000 UTC]

Hahahaha thanks alot for commenting!!

I try to bring as much dynamism as an animation.

But part of my nonsensical humour is lost in animation that I can bring in comics, such as 4th wall breaks and aberrant sound effects = )

I'm happy you enjoyed!

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Guncannon In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 01:35:59 +0000 UTC]

lol, nice
heh, though I hadn't even noticed the mistakes till you mentioned them....

well, keep on truckin and good luck

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Guncannon [2007-11-20 02:16:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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GlenMiles In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 01:03:37 +0000 UTC]

Your style is so freaking cool.

The panels where his Shakka's sword bearing hands switched I figured you wanted it to be like he switched hands in mid-air since it stayed in that hand for the duration of the match.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to GlenMiles [2007-11-20 02:16:26 +0000 UTC]

Yeah... that's actually how I *corrected* it.

I just figured ''well maybe he IS -that- fast'' xD

Beside the whole jump in the face + slash is meant to last like... a single segond

Thanks = )

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kamikazesouljah In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 00:45:01 +0000 UTC]

As per usual, I love your style [which is getting better in execution, I might add!]

Honestly, very cute.

CROTCHED! ... by far, my favourite moment of the whole thing.

That is all, as you were.

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Sebbythefreak In reply to kamikazesouljah [2007-11-20 00:49:21 +0000 UTC]

Thank you = D

I'm happy you enjoyed the crotched part, it was the hardest part xD In animation something like this is incredibly easy to demonstrate, but in comic format, I had trouble finding the correct pannelling. Eventually, the sound effect really iced the cake > = )

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kamikazesouljah In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-20 01:26:52 +0000 UTC]

Well done and thank you so much for your effort, man!

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Xeno-striker In reply to ??? [2007-11-20 00:41:04 +0000 UTC]

OMG!!! this makes me wanna join!! your style is perfect for this, good job man!!

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lawsae In reply to Xeno-striker [2007-11-20 03:11:40 +0000 UTC]

You really should join Zeno

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Xeno-striker In reply to lawsae [2007-11-20 05:25:58 +0000 UTC]

maybe i will, I'm not sure yet

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Sebbythefreak In reply to Xeno-striker [2007-11-20 00:46:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you dude! = D
That warmed my heart xD

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Xeno-striker In reply to Sebbythefreak [2007-11-20 05:24:44 +0000 UTC]

no prob :3

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