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sola-scriptura — Sorry For Letting You Down
Published: 2003-05-27 04:10:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 67; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Never been good enoughAlway\'s been to weak
To slow
To poor
To quiet
Never been good enough for love
My insatiable desire for love has tripped me up
I was always the one with the broken family
I was always the one rejected by every girl
I was always the one who was never cool
I was always the one who was on the outside
Foeced to hide my true self from view
Didn\'t want people to see me as I was
My jokes were never funny enough
Sick of being stabbed in the front
Learned to shut my heart
Learned to shut my mouth
Learned to shut my soul
Learned to keep free of torment
Thought I had changed
Thought that I was worthy
Thought that I could be loved
Thought that I was okay
But it was all a farce
I am coming apart
I am not worthy
I cannot be loved
Don\'t be my friend
I will only let you down
I will only fail you
Don\'t be my friend
I\'m sorry
I\'m sorry for letting you down
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I also like the emotion, and you used repetition very effectively, in my opinion. It's a good poem, sad though. Sorry you had to go through that.
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I like the emotion you expressed, the depth. I think a lot of people can relate to this on one level or another. I was tripped up a couple of times though. Might think about changing some of it, for instance...where you start with I was always, I would put it in there the first time and leave it out of the next 3 lines. Same with 'Learned to' and 'Thought that". I would only use it in the first line and remove it from the second line. I think...imho...that the repetition is redundant. It is definately a good poem though...a good concept.
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I really like this one..I'm sorry you had to have such a bad experience to write this, but I love the honesty in it. You're braver than me, I can't write about myself, so for that alone you already score very highly with me. One itsy bitsy thing to watch though, the typos are starting to creep in. Aside from that, I think this is brilliant. Good job Alex, you're a legend. And I mean that. She doesn't deserve you as far as I can see.
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hey, i feel like alot of those things you described much of the time. your not completely alone. and i doubt your the kind of person who would let friends down intentionally, if your friends think that? perhaps the problem is with them. be who you want to be. and keep up the writing.
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