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Sprog — Enclosed In Pain No.30
Published: 2003-09-25 20:29:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 57; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 10
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Enclosed In PainWay back when,
When the light was bright,
And the darkness was pushed back.
That’s when it all happened.
Because of you, the darkness pushed in,
It broke down the door, the door to my heart,
And overcame what I thought was invincible,
These things so invincible became vulnerable.
So let it destroy me, let it devastate my insides.
For your to blame now, and I hate you.
So fuck off and leave me to drown,
I don’t need this, not anymore.
Now we have to wonder, what happens when the light is gone?
Who comes out? What happens in the darkness?
Or do I not want to know of those dark demons?
So slowly, my soul turns black, organs freeze in sheer cold.
All because of that event, that one-day, and now I’m unreal.
A figment of your memory, but with you all the way,
Just never in the light, never warm, but always existing.
Just don’t experience what I have, because the pain is excruciating.
Comments: 3
u really succeeded in making me feel what u think. i might've used some shorter words here and there 2 make it flow more, like "now" instead of "became" in the 2nd stanza, but it's easy to criticise and hard 2 write a poem as good as this. really good overall.
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So let it destroy me, let it devastate my insides.
For your to blame now, and I hate you.
So fuck off and leave me to drown,
I don’t need this, not anymore.
I love this stanza... though I would put "let me drown"
This is amazing, so powerful...
so young, so angry, damn that rap music... (joke!... I watch dr dolittle2 too much) but really this is a beautiful poem.
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"Because of you, the darkness pushed in,
It broke down the door, the door to my heart,
And overcame what I thought was invincible,
These things so invincible became vulnerable."
Awesome stanza man...
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