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Published: 2005-12-22 03:58:46 +0000 UTC; Views: 52; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description A person changes when somethinf happens to them. It's a natural part of life and is a known fact that is carved deep in our insincts. You learn from your past to make a better future. At least that's what is supposed to happen. What does happen to a person when there's too much horrible things in there past that their learning from it is too far behind to catch up. They freeze. Their soul stops, their actual exsistance in their eyes dissapears. They don't live. They are just alive.

Here is my story. I dont remeber much of myself because I had erased it even from my own mind. I only obeyed and continued in a meaningless cycle. A routine that keep repeating itself and I had given up trying to break it. I'll start around the time I had changed. I never saw it coming because I was stuck in a place where I was convinced I could never escape. Until I met them. To the world they were nobodies. Just another set of eyes, another mind. But to me they were the greatest thing. They were the ones who had saved me. No matter what they say, they rescused me from my nightmare I was sure I would never wake up from.

~Al
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Comments: 5

ganlynde [2006-01-01 21:29:30 +0000 UTC]

Very good writing, but [again] there are a couple tiny grammatical errors. But who am I to talk, lol?

The prologue makes me want to read the book. Maybe...you could post it on deviant?

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thunder-my-hero In reply to ganlynde [2006-01-01 22:07:32 +0000 UTC]

Danke Shan! I might once i do some serious editing. I know bout the grammar thing. ^^ But thanks for noticing.

Toodle Pip

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ganlynde In reply to thunder-my-hero [2006-01-02 00:24:44 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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SpiralWolf [2005-12-22 23:51:46 +0000 UTC]

I like it. You know why

If you're looking for some grammar advice, I could help ye a bit. In the sentence that reads: "What does happen to a person when..." I think it needs to end in a question mark. And there's a typo in the first sentence, there.

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thunder-my-hero In reply to SpiralWolf [2005-12-23 05:11:14 +0000 UTC]

*notices*.....whoopsie teh....you know me not the greatest typer. ......*looks closer*.....i agree with the question mark thing...i wasn't to sure. I know it needed one grammar wise, but me still wasn't sure. ^^ Danke Shan

Love,

Toodle Pip

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