eqlipse [2004-08-24 21:28:09 +0000 UTC]
Hmmm....
I like...
the setting has a nice feel to it.
PRINGLES!!!!!!!!!!!
You've got the lighting angle down correctly, and the "sheen" effect from her costume.
Critiques:
Most of what I have to say is about the background. It's too uniform: no depression on the bed from the character's weight; the pillows/rolled blankets look more like blocks and do not have the fluidity you should find in something composed of cloth; the linework is too thick for the resolution size of the overall pic, and doesn't fit with the lighter lineweight of the character in the foreground; the character's grey shadow looks more like a squiggle on a seperate layer you forgot to erase... make it darker.
The most serious thing you need to work on is shading. It's WAY too vague, and offers nothing to describe the depth, value, shapes or sizes of objects. Also, it's not "strong" enough in some areas... it seems you're having trouble deciding where to use graded shading and sharp shading.
The character's proportions: they don't exactly "flow." I mean, you've got the general flow of motion correct (the sagging of the shoulders due to the weight that's being placed on her right arm, for example), but the joints don't seem to be moving at natural angles, or, rather, that the motion that moves from one part of the body to the next isn't being communicated properly.
The forehead's too big.
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