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I'm no writer, but here's a prologue I wrote, please tell me what you think of it:

October fourth, 1967

It was a cold, clear and beautiful night. A light
breeze blew across the shores. The cold murky waters from the Gulf of Maine splashed themselves against the rocky shores as each wave came in. The stars were outand they sparkled like ornaments in the sky, this was surely going to be a night to remember for the small fishing village of Shag Harbour, Nova Scotia.
The time was around eleven o'clock at night when
eighteen-year-old Laurie Wickens was driving home with
three friends. As he drove pass th local post office,
something in the sky caught his attention. He looked up and saw a large yellow-orange light followed by a string of
four smaller lights of the same colour. The string of flashing lights seemed to have been following him, intrigued by the
lights in the sky, Laurie found himself racing west on
highway three as he followed them. The lights eventually
descended into the treeline at a forty-five degree angle
and he and his friends lost track of them. They then saw a bright flash of light and heard a whistling sound as if something dropped from the sky. They believed it might have fallen into the harbour, so Laurie sped down toward the waterfront. He and his friends made it to the top of the hill where about sixteen people - including officers - stood and gazed at a bright yellow hemisphere bob up and down, three hundred some-odd yards from shore.
The time was 11:38pm; the RCMP had arrived and had
begun to close off the highway, lighthouse keepers in the
surrounding areas were put on red alert and the Rescue
Coordination Centre in Halifax had been called. Nobody was sure what had just happened, many believed it was a plane crash. That was just one story from that night. Many
reports were made throughout Nova Scotia that night about lights in the skies. The search teams sent to investigate called off the search a week later, stating that they uncovered "nil results". But was there more behind the Shag Harbour Incident? A secret beyond lights in the sky and government cover-ups? As the dark object sunk deeper and deeper into the depths of the harbour, so did its secrets. But the story only starts there.

Description
I'm no writer, but here's a prologue I wrote, please tell me what you think of it:

October fourth, 1967

It was a cold, clear and beautiful night. A light
breeze blew across the shores. The cold murky waters from the Gulf of Maine splashed themselves against the rocky shores as each wave came in. The stars were outand they sparkled like ornaments in the sky, this was surely going to be a night to remember for the small fishing village of Shag Harbour, Nova Scotia.
The time was around eleven o'clock at night when
eighteen-year-old Laurie Wickens was driving home with
three friends. As he drove pass th local post office,
something in the sky caught his attention. He looked up and saw a large yellow-orange light followed by a string of
four smaller lights of the same colour. The string of flashing lights seemed to have been following him, intrigued by the
lights in the sky, Laurie found himself racing west on
highway three as he followed them. The lights eventually
descended into the treeline at a forty-five degree angle
and he and his friends lost track of them. They then saw a bright flash of light and heard a whistling sound as if something dropped from the sky. They believed it might have fallen into the harbour, so Laurie sped down toward the waterfront. He and his friends made it to the top of the hill where about sixteen people - including officers - stood and gazed at a bright yellow hemisphere bob up and down, three hundred some-odd yards from shore.
The time was 11:38pm; the RCMP had arrived and had
begun to close off the highway, lighthouse keepers in the
surrounding areas were put on red alert and the Rescue
Coordination Centre in Halifax had been called. Nobody was sure what had just happened, many believed it was a plane crash. That was just one story from that night. Many
reports were made throughout Nova Scotia that night about lights in the skies. The search teams sent to investigate called off the search a week later, stating that they uncovered "nil results". But was there more behind the Shag Harbour Incident? A secret beyond lights in the sky and government cover-ups? As the dark object sunk deeper and deeper into the depths of the harbour, so did its secrets. But the story only starts there.