AbCat [2007-08-01 07:38:25 +0000 UTC]

I love the hand-planes.

:~)

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bravesville [2004-03-19 22:51:34 +0000 UTC]

Lovely. The freestyle formatt is done extremely well; really mirrors the loose atmosphere you are speaking of here. I devoured every word -- and did so numerous times. I loved:
win
dows
down,

Wonderful work.

-- peace easy

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zerofixity [2004-02-22 04:33:24 +0000 UTC]

hand planes are always fun driving.
that's really neat. i bet it'd sound even better out loud.

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demiane [2003-11-20 04:56:23 +0000 UTC]

I love how the words are flying around as if you're holding them out the window as you drive. This poem really makes me miss summer and makes me yearn for a road trip. Damn it, you bastard.

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flamemc [2003-11-19 09:09:14 +0000 UTC]

Anything that messes around with form and makes it work is alright by me. (I can't you see!)

Nice work.

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theunwarymariner [2003-11-19 04:58:06 +0000 UTC]

this flows very nicely

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carissima82 [2003-11-19 04:09:02 +0000 UTC]

the sporadic word/line splicing is reminiscent of hair flying out a rolled-down window.

so i can like it.
it does have a sense of contentment to it. it's comfortingly recognizable.

dig it.

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punky-o [2003-11-18 23:32:00 +0000 UTC]

seriously the form here is nice, I always admire things that slip out of the mold, this does so nicely.
Secondly I a good memory surfaced even within me and I dug that. Kudos.

punky

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voices [2003-11-18 22:32:40 +0000 UTC]

i tried to post a comment and it didnt work, arh!!!
basically what i said was kudos for pulling of the form, because i tried it and i couldnt, notepad just didnt like it, and i really like the image you create here.

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