Reach-74 In reply to lTofSMITIA [2013-01-27 07:21:16 +0000 UTC]

Darkness is cancelled. It has evolved into something I call the Crisis series. I haven't released it because I want to smooth out the plot so it is simpler to understand.

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lTofSMITIA In reply to Reach-74 [2013-01-28 02:45:29 +0000 UTC]

Ahh I actually meant my Pokemon Darkness. Like, was my ongoing fanfic, Pokemon Darkness, the reason you watched me?

Sorry for the miscommunication.

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Reach-74 In reply to lTofSMITIA [2013-01-28 03:34:00 +0000 UTC]

Sorry, I didn't realize that until after I had sent it. I was writing my own fic for Pokemon called "Darkness". I was wondering how you had psychic powers for a good ten minutes...

Yes, Pokemon Darkness is the reason I was watching you.

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lTofSMITIA In reply to Reach-74 [2013-01-28 03:50:21 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha, that's all right xD but yay! Glad you like it! Any particular thoughts so far?

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Reach-74 In reply to lTofSMITIA [2013-01-28 04:33:03 +0000 UTC]

I want to see more of Bianca. I don't really know where you are going with her. I guess you are going the direction of "she has no emotion now", but I want to see more to find out what that means. Can she feel pain? Does she still have a fight or flight response? Will her mental abilities increase to compensate for half of her mind being metaphorically closed off? What does it all mean?

Is Dawn based off of Platina from Pokemon Adventures? If so, will Lucas and Barry be like Diamond and Pearl? Will the Galactic Commanders (Mars, Jupiter, and Saturn)be like they are in the comic as well (ie- a reflection of the hero they fight at their respective lakes)? If so, that is awesome because I loved the villains in Adventures (Mars reminded me of the Joker and Jupiter reminded me of Bane).

I am not a big fan of original characters in Fanfiction, but because yours are well done I will not complain. Keep them well done though or face my wrath.

I am against how Rui died. Heroes should die in a way that is worthy of their sacrifice. Sure, I understand you want it to be dark, but the dark parts should happen afterward with character reactions (ie- Wes getting his revenge and such). In my opinion, heroes shouldn't be killed if interesting stories could still be told about them.

Where is Michael? He stopped Cipher in Orre 5 years after Wes and Rui did, so Cipher's return should be enough to get him to come out and fight. If Cipher subdued him or something, I could accept that only on the basis that it is established in the story that he has been defeated in the past (through dialogue or a obscure news report or something). What about the others in XD? Dr. Krane? Dr. Lily? Jovi? Hell, it is hinted that Lovrina had a heel faced turn after Micheal beat Cipher, so what about her? Did Cipher arrest her for betraying them? It would be nice to know that Orre at least didn't go down without a fight. These seem like really good stories that could be told, even if they are just glossed over briefly as an aside.

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lTofSMITIA In reply to Reach-74 [2013-01-28 05:45:04 +0000 UTC]

Oh gosh, I've never gotten so much feedback before. Thanks you so much! I'll try to answer your questions as best I can without being too spoilery.

As for Bianca, she's definitely going to be in it more, but mostly through the eyes of other characters. At least, that's what I have planned currently. That's always subject to change if I come up with an idea I really like. Some of those questions I could answer, but some I hadn't considered, so thank you for that! I'll be putting more thought into her mental state. I think I've got a good idea of how these'll be answered. It'll be a few chapters, though.

As for Dawn, I'm afraid she's not. I haven't read the manga at all, not for lack of interest, but mostly because it seems like such a time-consuming thing to go through. The protagonists are all just the headcanon personality I developed for them while playing the games. Dawn's was actually a fairly recent development. I've already got planned out what I'm gonna do with the Galactic Commanders, and I think it's reasonably cool.

It's very nice to hear that Claire and Triton are well done! Especially from someone critical of OCs. I'll go ahead and assure you that they will be the only ones for the entire story. The character development of each of them is one of the main long-term things I have very elaborately thought out, so I hope they do stay well done.

It was a hard decision to kill Rui. I kept weighing the pros and cons of keeping her vs killing her. While she could certainly have been interesting in the story, I went with letting her die for a few reasons. The biggest was that I felt she would impact the story better and more meaningfully by her lack of presence, rather than her presence. Wes and Claire can't very well get revenge for her death if she wasn't killed now, can they? It was also something to push Claire towards the development and changes that will occur in Part 3: Sinnoh. There's also the fact that, being much older now and so concerned about her daughter, she would've be a hindrance to the plot in some cases, and I didn't wanna have to keep devoting time to convincing her to let Claire do something dangerous. Also, while it would be nice if heroes didn't die if they could still do good and interesting things, I've always been a fan of including blunt truths in stories, such as "Not all heroes get heroic sacrifices. Sometimes, they die for nothing." Finally, I just needed something really dramatic to end Part 2: Kanto on, and it fit the bill well. You may still disagree, but I hope you understand why I went the way I went.

And I can assure you I haven't forgotten about Michael, Dr Krane, and everyone else in XD: Gale of Darkness. I'll go ahead and tell you that they are still in Orre. Now, keep in mind that Cipher has Orre completely in its grasp, and isn't allowing any communications between it and the other regions (except Hoenn, which they also control). No one in Unova, Kanto, or Sinnoh knew anything about Cipher's takeovers until N came along. There's also no way Cipher would let anyone leave either region without their knowledge and consent. Basically, no one knows what's going on in Orre. Even N hasn't been there; he just learned during Hoenn's takeover that Orre was already controlled. Sadly, because of this, there's going to be very few details on Orre and its people until Part 6: Orre, which is way off, as it's the final part. I can at least tell you right now, though, that it certainly didn't go down without a fight. Those stories will be told, eventually.

Again, thanks so much for all the feedback! I really super-appreciate it!! Feel free to comment on future chapters if something occurs to you

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