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Happy early Birthday!
Have a wonderful day! Best wishes,
Cristina.
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yeah i like it a lot. What version do you have?
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No problem! Keep up the good work!
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Yeah, but I want to keep my account names consistent with my other accounts, so that's why
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I'm good. I'm actually planning a third Taismo story lol BUT Ive been too lazt to write it. Im kinda experiencing writer's block.
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Oh my you're surely quite the writer! I just don't have time these days! D: And writer's block... >.> Well, I wish you good luck with your third edition! 
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Yep. Thats the only struggle for the last story
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Yes. I need to come up with a good plot DX
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That's how I feel right now...I'm in like the sixth chapter of my sequel...and I don't know what the major plot is going to be... //bricked
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Damn. I don't even have the plot I want for that story. At least you're in chapter 6. Can u tell me the plot of your story? I can try and help you come up with the plot.
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Aww I'm sorry, I know the feels. OTL
Yeah, I may be in chapter six, but I still don't know where this story is going...bleh...
It's tough to explain, because it's a sequel (which acts as a prequel...think the Hobbit and the Lord of the Rings format). I've got ideas...but I don't know how to like...write them out into a full string plot at the moment. 
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Oh okay lol can you generally explain the type of plot for the prequel (EX. Boy meets girls, they fall in love, one of them dies in the end XD )?
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I suppose I can try.
So there's a girl (the protagonist) who has an excessive amount of adrenaline in her body. This causes her of course to be a lot quicker, and stronger than an average human being. Due to excessive work demand, her parents have left her under the care of a local friend who happens to be a doctor at the town's hospital. This of course means he often has to work the night shift and leaves the girl home alone often. The girl has a hidden distaste for her parents however, she always thinks they've abandoned her, when really they haven't.
Her uncle, is an intimidating Eugenic Researcher for the government who intends for his niece to visit him every other week or so at his office in order to run experiments and tests on her. The girl despises her uncle, but is threatened by him so she is forced to attend these appointments. She cannot tell anyone about these appointments or else she could fear execution by the law.
Her best friend has just started at the same high school as the protagonist as a Freshman. Her friend often visits her because of her loneliness at home. Her friend grows curious of the girl's disappearances after school only to find her come home with bruises and injection wounds. (From the testing). The protagonist refuses to tell her where she was.
On the first day of school, the protagonist leaves her cellphone in her 7th period classroom by accident. Her teacher (a history teacher lol) finds her phone and happens to read a text message sent to her by her uncle. The teacher feels guilty for reading such a personal piece of information, yet is alarmed by the harshness of the tone. When the girl comes back in a fluster to retrieve her phone, the teacher hands it back without a word.
The protagonist also has a school bully. She is a typical mean girl who harasses her everyday consistently. However, this bully is having a secret affair with the Freshman English teacher. She fears getting caught, and has a fake relationship with a senior boy who happens to be the protagonist's crush. All three of them share seventh period history.
...so...that's all I have for up to chapter 6 basically put...I need help. D:
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Daaaaaaamn XD what a messed up school!
A few questions. Do you know the main protagonists and antagonists? I just need to know that.
So I am guessing that there will be an antagonist from the government that will be involved?
Is this a dystopian novel?
This is what I'm formulating. Since she is superhuman, the government is interested in using her (No shit sherlock). Her uncle is probably a man that has been brainwashed by them secretly. IDK how yet, but that is the only logical reason I can think of. Maybe the government may be trying to form a dictatorship and they plan on brainwashing the protagonist to bring order and oppression in favor of the government.
As for the school bully, would she be part of the major plot. Or is she just a nuisance to the protagonist? Does the affair affect the main plot in anyway?
As for the history teacher, the teacher could be a former agent for the government that has seen the terrors and was able to escape the wrath of government hands. He could be part of an opposing organization against the government and he could just be a teacher as a cover up. The English teacher could just be a pervert ex-worker from the government that is actually along with the history teacher. Although the history teacher doesn't approve of the affair, he cannot make a scene due to fear of the organization being exposed.
Basically the protagonist, the history teacher, and the English teacher might join forces at some point.
What is the bio on her best friend? How can be assimilated in this story as someone influential?
These are just some thoughts. What do you think?
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I know right?
Do I know them? As in named them? Yes I have. I can list their names:
-Hope Brighton: Female Protagonist "supernatural abilities"
-Dr. (Daniel) Arkwright: Male Antagonist *Hope's uncle"
-Arielle Montgomery: Hope's best friend
-Mr. (James) Honordale: The seventh period history teacher
-Mr. (Ian) Hardy: The perverted English teacher
-Victoria Farewell: Hope's pesky bully who has an affair with Mr. Hardy
-Dr. (Adam) Galloway: Hope's parental guardian who is the renowned surgeon at the local hospital
...Those are the "main" characters that appear. Obviously some appear more than others, but those are the faces that are to be seen most often.
Yes, Dr. Arkwright is working for the government as a Eugenic Researcher. (If you don't already know, the study of Eugenics used to be a highly elite form of stuff and was well praised. Flatly stated it is the science of improving a human population by controlled breeding to increase the occurrence of desirable heritable characteristics.) He is curious of his niece's usual attributes and wants to figure out how to attain this desirable quality for the rest of humankind.
You can say it is a dystopian novel, yes.
...Maybe hmmm... sounds appealing. I need to write that down.
Hmm...haven't exactly thought of that. I was thinking it would be one of the "minor plots" during the rising action which would, yes, affect the major plot line. Which I still haven't figured out yet.
I really like your idea for the teachers. It fits in and makes sense. I think I'm going to use that one. Thank you.
Okay, so Arielle, Hope's best friend, practically lives with her. This is because Dr. Galloway (Hope's guardian) has to work the night shift at the hospital quite often, leaving Hope alone for the majority of the night. Dr. Galloway notices Hope's strange behavior and notices that she seems to arrive home later and later on certain days. She'd come home with bruises and wounds and Hope would refuse to tell him what was happening to her. Dr. Galloway then asks Arielle to keep an eye on Hope for him. Arielle is now glued to Hope's side for nearly the entire day, but some how manages to lose her at the end of the school day when she leaves to go meet up with her Uncle. (Arielle doesn't know that though).
If you are at all curious, this story takes place in this modern era in a small town harbor. c: So imagine chilly coastal weather, docks filled with boats, and a busy inner center of town. (That's where the government research facility is located).
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Hmm this is actually a very good idea.
Maybe the uncle plans domination. I think its a good idea on how maybe he brainwashed himself and maybe he can use this cynical greed and thirst for power to try and take over the country.
He can accomplish this by taking out Hope's blood little by little. He can even fool the government by sending false reports on Hope.
The uncle can possible have a group of his own.
This is the US right? Or another country perhaps?
You said that Arielle loses Hope at the end of the school day right? Arielle should be very curious about what happens to Hope right? So maybe one day she can follow Hope all the way home. The uncle would be surprised and tell Arielle to leave. Arielle refuses, lying that they need to work on homework. He threatens her and Hope punches the Uncle. They run away together and the uncle can chase them. As they run, the history teacher and English teacher can save them both somehow. When they're safe, they can be introduced to the group that is anti-government and against their uncle.
The concept of creating advanced people such as Hope can be a major plot in the story. Is it a good thing? Or is it a bad thing? Maybe the Uncle and his possible group just wants to use this research for themselves.
I really like this concept.
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