newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2019-09-25 04:01:58 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to neowhyachi [2019-09-25 04:02:08 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to SUP182 [2019-09-25 02:06:41 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to leoryff [2019-09-24 22:31:03 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to Kanjilearner3309 [2019-09-24 21:37:37 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to MrSmuttyDoodles [2019-09-24 12:35:18 +0000 UTC]

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2018-09-24 22:17:32 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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newdude3 In reply to SUP182 [2017-09-25 05:17:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks buddy. How are you doing?

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newdude3 In reply to neowhyachi [2017-09-25 05:17:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly. What's up Neo?

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2017-09-24 14:27:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you sir!

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newdude3 In reply to neowhyachi [2016-09-25 23:18:55 +0000 UTC]

Thank you good sir!

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 00:14:37 +0000 UTC]

Positive mayhem is the bestest mayhem after all.

So how is your project going? I'm a bit stuck(ish) on Ben Ambassador 3 but I think I'll solve it eventually.

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IncredibleIntruder In reply to newdude3 [2014-09-25 00:16:21 +0000 UTC]

I'm about half-done on my first draft for my project. The progress is erratic, but there is progress nonetheless.

As for BA3, need some help?

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 00:32:56 +0000 UTC]

Not quite yet I don't think...I have ideas I'm just thinking of the ending. Not sure if I want to add a second girl or not. It's tempting...but then you have a second character you know? So it's both a lot of new ideas but also complications.

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IncredibleIntruder In reply to newdude3 [2014-09-25 00:38:51 +0000 UTC]

Well, the first thing you want to do is write a first draft. You go on and write it down completely to make sure those you want to implicate have something to work with. Then, you can go on and try for an editor so that your second draft can be more streamlined and better-written.

As for BA3, if you ever need help, you can always send me a note and I'll do my best to make you progress in some small ways. As for a second girl, it could be fine if you have an idea of what you could do differently. She'd need a different attitude and perhaps some different techniques to at least make thing interesting. If it ends up being more of the same, there is no point to add a second character.

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 00:39:50 +0000 UTC]

All good points you have.

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IncredibleIntruder In reply to newdude3 [2014-09-25 00:43:59 +0000 UTC]

For instance, Excellen is a bit of a tease and does seem to have fun in seeing how seductive she is and how powerless people are to her charms. She use dances and other such neat tricks to make people fall for her so much that they become her willing slaves. However, what if a second character really goes for pure dominance? Without being mean or simply evil, a second character could simply bask others in an aura of her superiority as she hypnotizes them into loving and submitting her through various things. She could explain why they need to succumb and why it is inevitable that in the end, they will all be hers.

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 01:22:01 +0000 UTC]

Intriguing...although I must confess that it makes me want more Excellen because the dances/tricks are FUN to write and come up with

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IncredibleIntruder In reply to newdude3 [2014-09-25 01:31:20 +0000 UTC]

They are indeed quite fun, but the trick would be to create a contrast if another character ever comes up. Same goals, different methods and all that.

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 02:13:40 +0000 UTC]

This is true. Few characters means that they need to be unique. It's hard to give up the belly dancing though. Super hot.

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IncredibleIntruder In reply to newdude3 [2014-09-25 02:19:18 +0000 UTC]

I can certainly understand this.

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newdude3 In reply to IncredibleIntruder [2014-09-25 02:22:04 +0000 UTC]

More belly dancing for all!

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newdude3 In reply to neowhyachi [2014-09-24 19:02:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you sir

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newdude3 In reply to The-Bonkura-Clan [2014-01-02 03:38:59 +0000 UTC]

Yes I am. it'll most likely be a short 'finale' chapter as the last page is just a single (albeit sexy) panel. I just got caught up in other stuff and have not finished it as of yet. I'm glad so many people are enjoying both the chapters and the illustrations, Jimryu's talent as an artist makes me wish I was a better writer to go along with it.

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The-Bonkura-Clan In reply to newdude3 [2014-01-02 04:37:58 +0000 UTC]

Not unlike my first attempt at writing in a Jimryu contest.

Nazo

Member of The-Bonkura-Clan

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newdude3 In reply to BluRider [2013-04-20 03:21:52 +0000 UTC]

Lack of inspiration I suppose

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Argonisgema In reply to newdude3 [2013-04-23 03:32:54 +0000 UTC]

I recently started reading the Bishoujoland stories and i gotta say i enjoyed reading them
hope the're are more to come.

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BluRider In reply to newdude3 [2013-04-20 14:21:21 +0000 UTC]

What a pity. Hope that the revival of HBL here on DeviantArt spurs you to start writing again.

Will you be joining in our HBL competition?

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gbrn32e In reply to XXFanXofX4869XX [2013-02-04 01:13:53 +0000 UTC]

If I'm correct, this was posted by an author, not an artist. These pics were a commission done by the well known hypno artist, sue-chan.

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XXFanXofX4869XX In reply to gbrn32e [2013-02-05 01:18:59 +0000 UTC]

I don't suppose you have a link to said artist?

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BluRider In reply to XXFanXofX4869XX [2013-03-19 14:02:19 +0000 UTC]

I do. The artist is Sue-Chan, and you can find her here:

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