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3HoursAway — One From Two
Published: 2005-12-27 16:09:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 2992; Favourites: 69; Downloads: 162
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Description I’m waiting for you to arrive;
My passion is starting to revive.
Hypnotized by our front door,
I don’t think that I can wait anymore.
Anxiousness is breaking in,
And my patience is wearing a gypsy’s grin.
When are you gonna be home?
I am restless here when I’m all alone.

So, the moment you’re through that door,
I’m gonna pounce and tackle you to the floor,
And kiss your angel face,
So you know you’re home in the perfect place.
And later, somewhere in the hall,
I’m gonna randomly grind you against the wall,
And wrap myself up in you;
Pressing close enough to make one from two.

My heart is beating way too fast.
There’s not enough oxygen for me to last.
My sense is seeking just your sound;
I wonder if you can hear my pining heart pound.
Are you coming through that door?
Or are you gonna make me sit here and wait some more?
The air’s surrounded by your cologne;
Oh, tell me you’re getting close to home.

The moment you’re through that door,
I’m gonna rip off all the pretty clothes you wore,
And jam my lips upon your neck.
Cause when you’re not here I am such a wreck.
And later when we’re in our room,
I’ll be waiting in love for your heart to consume,
And I’ll wrap myself up in you;
Pressing close enough to make one from two.
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Comments: 61

MtVentouxsPeak [2007-08-07 17:33:30 +0000 UTC]

some of your lines were marvelous.
i mean, don't get me wrong. the whole poem was great! but some of those lines... exquisite.

"And my patience is wearing a gypsy’s grin"
"Pressing close enough to make one from two"
"I wonder if you can hear my pining heart pound"

lovely.
great work.

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CircadianTwilight [2007-01-15 03:25:09 +0000 UTC]

this is somewhere near to how im feelin. great work.

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DelinquentsShrine [2006-05-20 23:59:08 +0000 UTC]

that was beuatiful!!!! i was reading it out loud and by the end of the poem i was singing it ... its also very visual

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coheed7503 [2006-02-22 22:47:57 +0000 UTC]

Love it. Flowed well. Loved the ending. Random Props.

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patukumchan [2006-01-30 22:42:13 +0000 UTC]

holy shit.

just..... holy shit. i like it.

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FaisanSama [2006-01-20 04:16:16 +0000 UTC]

so beautiful T_T... I could imagine everything... so.. I'm a little pervert too xD

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LemBlack [2006-01-13 19:20:33 +0000 UTC]

Man!! This is amazing! This poem is cute,sweet and sexy!!! Your a really good writer Ian!!!

Take Care and I will fav this one

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ElaclairesSkies [2006-01-10 02:47:30 +0000 UTC]

This is so touching, I love your poems, they have such wonderful rythme.

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EternalMisery [2006-01-03 01:21:24 +0000 UTC]

Wow......... I'M GOING TO START FREAKIN' CRYING!!!

B-e-a-utiful.

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coolvamp007 [2006-01-03 00:22:43 +0000 UTC]

You are a God of poetry!!!! It is really beautiful and full of emotions, I love all your poems. You are such a talented writer.

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kloey [2006-01-02 21:56:10 +0000 UTC]

This is so beautiful...so personal to you, but beautiful and easy to relate to Xx

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Wymen [2006-01-02 10:08:21 +0000 UTC]

Theres nothing for me to say that hasn't already been said. It's beautiful

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sofqmd [2006-01-02 06:24:30 +0000 UTC]

thats excellent... superb... great......

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toki88 [2006-01-02 04:49:36 +0000 UTC]

Seriously...WOW. If only I had a guy like that XP :I so this!

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Phinoex101 [2005-12-31 21:42:54 +0000 UTC]

Wow this is really good. Keep up the good work

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ImitationOfLife [2005-12-31 11:28:47 +0000 UTC]

I cant remember if I commented on this already but..

Aw, how I envy your amazing writing talent. The fact that you can explain the most intricate feelings, that you can connect emotionally with whomever is reading it, that you almost always bring a tear to my eye with your writing..

Its awesome.

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Chuchkit [2005-12-31 10:45:24 +0000 UTC]

Oh myy god..
*drule*
That was sooo ... yummmy!!
Arrrgggggg......
[i'll add to fav-once i learn how to do that ]
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I wish to have my other piece
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That was awsome!!

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Spasticflags719 [2005-12-31 06:33:21 +0000 UTC]

That's amazing.

You have a way with words unlike any others I've seen

*t3h favorite*

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Chuchkit [2005-12-30 15:33:36 +0000 UTC]

Oh that was soooo...
Mmmm...Yummy....
Wish to have my other piece..

Arrrggg...
Loved it

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Sleveyizm [2005-12-30 14:00:19 +0000 UTC]

Fkn Gr8 I can relate ! do we all feel this way afterwards?

and masturbation in some cases cant help, if the previous sex was !!

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insanechild182 [2005-12-29 22:21:27 +0000 UTC]

omg!!! this is great!!!!! very good job!!!!!

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Denzai [2005-12-29 02:54:11 +0000 UTC]

awwwww i did like some strange fuzzy happy gesture after i read that... and hugged myself! thats adorable!

+fav for sure!

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3HoursAway In reply to Denzai [2005-12-29 02:57:16 +0000 UTC]

thnx

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Denzai In reply to 3HoursAway [2005-12-31 08:33:57 +0000 UTC]

its so cool you and azu are together. i used to read his sad breakup journal thingies awhile ago and was all "aww... he needs a good person!"
and you sem like a good person.
not to be mistaken, we dont really talk, but i think its possible to worry about someone you dont know... yaknow?
oh god i sound like a stalker!!
am i the pnly person who reads journals of ppl who dont talk to me?!?!?!?!
h god ill shutup now lol

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3HoursAway In reply to Denzai [2005-12-31 13:55:22 +0000 UTC]

: ) It's cute. Unfortunately his sad breakup journals were also about me :-/ But neither of our feelings ever really changed. In fact I think they just got much deeper going through everything.

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Denzai In reply to 3HoursAway [2005-12-31 22:23:19 +0000 UTC]

REALLY?! i didnt know that!

lol i had no idea you guys were together before this!

well shows how attentive III am, yes?

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3HoursAway In reply to Denzai [2005-12-31 23:22:55 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you didn't know cause everything's much better this way

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Denzai In reply to 3HoursAway [2006-01-01 06:40:30 +0000 UTC]

lol but i still know now !!

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unbreakable-tears [2005-12-28 23:30:00 +0000 UTC]

this is truely a wondershot... it's so prestine and circular... ^-^... its like an emotional slab and by reading it you get a lick... but that lickk is never a bite of it...

humm that was quaint eitherway i thought it was stunning, beautiful and a wee bit naughty...

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Roxyangel22 [2005-12-28 21:51:13 +0000 UTC]

Very nice! Thats funny! i know the feeling being like that puppy! i love this piece!!!

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girlybaby [2005-12-28 19:32:52 +0000 UTC]

This is brilliant! N believe me you're not weird I told my bf I missed him to his face last night!! Then again I am weird.. Am well you could be weird then but at least you're not alone n also extremely talented along with it!!?

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jinubean [2005-12-28 17:58:24 +0000 UTC]

that's awesome!!

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Lycen [2005-12-28 12:54:30 +0000 UTC]

wow...i love it...it's so awsome...wow...

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sagebirt [2005-12-28 11:24:52 +0000 UTC]

interesting! i suppose i should be grateful you wrote this you could have just masturbated instead

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3HoursAway In reply to sagebirt [2005-12-28 14:54:14 +0000 UTC]

LOL jeez That might go down as the all-time best comment I ever recived :-B

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autumn-wind [2005-12-28 09:10:04 +0000 UTC]

I love the way it rhymes.
Such a wonderful poem

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poetryhack82 [2005-12-28 08:41:28 +0000 UTC]

bar none .......the best poem I have read on here , ever. So passionate, so consise.........I love it I love I love it.

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Clueless-Tsunami [2005-12-28 07:18:25 +0000 UTC]

Aaw! Just made me wanna say...

"Rawr. ;D"

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deirdre-a [2005-12-28 06:48:10 +0000 UTC]

i think the last three lines are my favorite. especially the first of those three

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caytea [2005-12-28 05:51:53 +0000 UTC]

that was so beautiful and sweet

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OnlineAgent [2005-12-28 05:21:07 +0000 UTC]

beautiful... I try to imagine exactly how you must feel, its obvious (as with all of your work) how you feel about each other. But you always manage to find a new way to say it.

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purpleshawl [2005-12-28 01:46:49 +0000 UTC]

Can feel the strong feelings you have within for your love... So tempted to fav it, but its too sexy & sensual

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loserkid-defined [2005-12-28 01:33:44 +0000 UTC]

that was beautiful <3

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self-induced [2005-12-28 00:57:03 +0000 UTC]

This piece is so strong, I really identify with it, it's really sensual and romantic and just real. I'm gonna go rifle through your gallery now.
Great, great job. +fav

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LeneLen [2005-12-27 22:26:10 +0000 UTC]

i really appreciate your poem for the passion, for the sensuality, for all the emotions so genuine!

i like the repetitions of "ands" and "ors" showing the impatience. Is the repetition of " the moment you’re through that door" intentional? Does it accidentally correspond with the last lines in both cases? finally, i was wondering about the punctuation, if exlamation marks and all the punctuation wouldn't make an additional stylistic device that could emphasise the message..

oh, these are really details and i'm not specialist at all! the most important is that i really enjoyed reading this. you're very good with words, talented definitely.

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darkangelxx [2005-12-27 21:42:47 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful Ian.

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xXMinnaXx [2005-12-27 21:10:53 +0000 UTC]

Wow... That poem described everything one can feel. it described passion in your soul. It feels so true and whole.. it brought a smile on my face. It brought this teenage chick out of her emo phase.


my my, how awesome you are

geez, azu is so fucking lucky


magnificent work!! AARRGHH!! O_O God i wish i could marry you! >w<

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Shingy [2005-12-27 20:55:42 +0000 UTC]

Very nicely done, there's nothing I can criticize so I'll just favorite it.

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3HoursAway In reply to Shingy [2005-12-27 20:58:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! That was such a nice thing to say

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spreadingmywings [2005-12-27 20:47:22 +0000 UTC]

awww. u two are so adorable!!!!! :-D hooray.

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