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This is a chapter that I've written. If you have read some of my previous work, you could tell that this is a part of Tall Tales.
But which part? There's so much now that it's confusing.
This is supposed to happen during the morning on that fateful day, when the man dressed in black came to see the bard in that tavern.

I am posting this in my scraps for two reasons:
1) I don't want people to see it in my main gallery as this is a work in progress. In fact, I won't submit this to any groups for now.
2) I wish for feedback on this.

I'm looking for feedback beyond "nice". What I've tried to do is to show rather than tell, but I'm not sure if I managed to accomplish this. Any feedback, positive or negative, will be appreciated.
If you're leaving negative feedback, please specify which part you are referring to so that I will see how I can continue to learn.

Click on download on the right to view the file

Description
This is a chapter that I've written. If you have read some of my previous work, you could tell that this is a part of Tall Tales.
But which part? There's so much now that it's confusing.
This is supposed to happen during the morning on that fateful day, when the man dressed in black came to see the bard in that tavern.

I am posting this in my scraps for two reasons:
1) I don't want people to see it in my main gallery as this is a work in progress. In fact, I won't submit this to any groups for now.
2) I wish for feedback on this.

I'm looking for feedback beyond "nice". What I've tried to do is to show rather than tell, but I'm not sure if I managed to accomplish this. Any feedback, positive or negative, will be appreciated.
If you're leaving negative feedback, please specify which part you are referring to so that I will see how I can continue to learn.

Click on download on the right to view the file