Si1VeR-ReBoRn [2013-01-22 14:13:40 +0000 UTC]

I like how this poem is structurered and the strong imagery involved, gr8 job!

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AzizrianDaoXrak [2012-12-07 03:53:49 +0000 UTC]

This is just a friendly note to let you know this lovely piece has been FEATURED! [link]

I'd appreciate it if you stopped by to take a peek at the other pieces and faved the article to support the other artists!

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storyofmylife054 [2011-01-12 21:54:10 +0000 UTC]

Not at all! If anything, the structure adds to the piece.

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WanderingHere [2011-01-10 01:15:51 +0000 UTC]

the structure adds to the piece so much. and this is beautiful.

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3wyl [2011-01-06 18:52:41 +0000 UTC]

You're missing an o in "to late".

Other than that, fantastic stuff. I don't think the structure or the formatting takes away from this piece at all... I mean, it adds more to it, and it emphasises certain aspects more, which increases the profundity of things.

I like the progression and how you've approached winter in this form.

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IgnitionInStars [2011-01-05 16:36:30 +0000 UTC]

love, love

last line is so relatable to me right now.

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londonrey [2011-01-05 05:23:33 +0000 UTC]

not at all.
i like the structure.
it separates out the months.
"january brings news of snow
but winter you're to late
too sweet
we're cold already"-- this bit is absolutely fantasmagorical.
GOSH.
I can just hear that in my head.
"we're cold already..."
that line just echos.
Brava!!

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