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AlecBell — Declining
Published: 2010-01-18 22:43:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 785; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 6
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Her years are ebbing,her face exposed, a stony beach,
winter deserted.
Memories remain,
keeping secrets from themselves.
The past has faded.
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I'm always impressed by your mastery in rendering so many human experiences and conditions. Particularly fond here of the metaphor of her exposed face as a stony beach: captures so much meaning, with such efficient economy. I quite like the quietly sinister notion of memories perfidiously keeping secrets from themselves too. I mean, when you can't even trust your own memories...
Excellent work. Hats off to you!
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Thank you Jamie. The idea of dementia underlies the memory image.
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Memories keeping secrets from themselves: I think I've experienced something like that.
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U done did do a lil' Hocus Pocus with this Haiku and its all quite good
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Thanks Pip! A generous comment indeed
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Those work really well together...I don't see the photo anymore, though.
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Thank you.
I didn't include the image, because the earlier poem wasn't written as a commentary. In the new poem, the reference to Guille's image is less relevant (I think)
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As a commentary (or no longer one), I can see where you're coming from. Personally, I think the photo would still add something, but that's for you to determine. With or without the photo, it's a beautiful piece.
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but, if you are damned enough to stick around long enough, the patterns will repeat.
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'Keeping secrets from itself'... I love the way you phrased this haiku. It says volumes, and I get the feeling that it will linger in my mind for some time... A sad, beautiful truth of a poem.
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Admirable beasts!
I wonder whwere they got that reputation from?
I never forget
but I cannot remember.
I make do with dreams.
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That's another good one Alec
I think it is a fairly new saying....20th century! Scientifically proved to be true
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It's only half a poem so far. Sekoda has two stanzas, 5-7-7.
I'll see if I can finish it!
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So true!!
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Thank you.
Memory is an enigmatic component of identity, known to degrade with age!
And yet the past might well become more compelling, as one might sift ashes to understand the cause of a blaze.
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I must admit that alot of memory is only reawakened by photographs.....or people telling us about things that happened ...so do we really remember what happened or... what?
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!
--I'm sixteen years old and I can relate to this.
Weird.
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In adolescence, we do infact have a distant past, on the other side of the hormonal barrier, so memory is needed to create a new collage of identity.
"We've got to get ourseives back to the Garden" as a song from Woodstock has it.
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