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alizarin β Between the turn of seconds
Published: 2009-11-15 15:50:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 2112; Favourites: 52; Downloads: 26
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For between the turn of seconds we shall have our eternityBid your song on my windowsill
Turn the hourglass and I part my heart in two
for between the turn of the seconds
we shall have our eternity
Take me to castles in the sky
and broken arches in enchanted woods
for half my heart I gave to you
and between the turn of the seconds
we are living our eternity
And if once we ascend from the bowel of the earth
follow the light of the moon and do not look back
for we shall not give time her dominion tonight
and between the turn of the seconds
our eternity is not over
and when the morning threatens the night horizon
fear not of what will come
for between the turn of the seconds
we still have our eternity
A/N: *urmm... sorry if the words are really bad XD*
As always, concrit welcome
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First of all i'd like to say that the text does half the job. One feeling at first glance, a complete story after reading it. Suddenly i got in a new world with different rules.
Great composition and i love the line inflections.
I'm also a great fan of the details you fill spaces with (like the sky..oh my!) Such little things make it look rich and a pleasure to view.
Your drawings always have that glow of red-yellow color, that gives the world a burning/warm feel to it and makes it look glamorous somehow, like something important or royal is happening, even if the actual scene is more ordinary. The color adds the spiritual and emotional dimension.
What i'm trying to say and doesn't really come out right is that I feel like i am behind your eyelids when you close your eyes and this is what happens back there. This is your filter and it's nice being there.
PS:the scan and the full view is making me sad. Also i'm not sure about that texture/image border around the drawing. It hasn't got much to do with it.
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Wheee! Thank you for my first critique ever XD I'm really happy that you liked it and the message got through
About the border, yes, I think it's a bit much. I'll change it into black background I guess.
Thank you again
PS: Yes, I do realize that I should get this to a good scanner
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photography also does a pretty good job with the right settings
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Hi,
Youre deviantion is choosen to compeet in the monthly fevercontest on
See here [link] the folder with all entry's that compeet. You can vote for youre favourite untill saterday
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Oh! itΒ΄s so romantic!! i love the sky details, so cool. ItΒ΄s a really expresive... like a dream!!
Spanish Kisses!
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As always, I *love* the poetry that goes with the artwork. Do you write them yourself? What comes first, the words or the image?
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Thank you
Generally, the image comes first, together with sort of 'key phrases' of the words, that I'll try to string together into something resembling coherence 
I'm actually quite new at putting words with artwork thing, as generally coherent words flow to me much less naturally than images, so I'm really happy you love the poetry
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Now that's what I'm talking about
The poem is quite nice
Regarding the image itself, well, what can I say? I find it quite beautiful 
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Thank you, I seem to be under the attack of a semi-romantic fluffy muse right now x).
I'm glad you like the strange poem, I was rather doubtful on whether to put it there at all or not, but the two pieces really need to be shown together somehow, so I put it in anyway
On further inspection, I do agree with you that the texture background is a bit too much XD
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I always preffer that the paintings have a comment from the artist. It helps me understand more of the background in which said artwork was created
I just remembered I had to send Azisa a note, I'll send her one tonight ^-^
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