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Published: 2004-06-03 01:02:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 193; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 34
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Total ControlThis depression has taken control
Over my body, over my soul
Sometimes I feel as if I am all but whole,
This finishing cut across the threshold of skin
I realize that once again
Depression has total control
I try to stand up and walk away
But the pain of depression is making me stay
Every cut, every scar,
I feel as if I am being barred,
This chain holding me here
Is my pain of nobody being near
Feeling totally fake, all but pure
Seems like this blade is my final cure
I tried to hide these feelings inside
But the longer doing so,
I felt as if I had died
From afar all seems well,
But my life is a living Hell
Take this secret and please donβt tell,
Just pretend my life is fine and swell
I try to stand up and walk away
But the pain of depression is making me stay
Every cut, every scar,
I feel as if I am being barred,
This chain holding me here
Is my pain of nobody being near
This void of happiness doesnβt allow my soul to rest
Keeps my life a complete mess,
I am tired of this masquerade
My final cut, I am no longer afraid
Peace at last, I can now drop my blade
I am doing this alone,
Overcoming depression on my own,
I am now in total control
Not this depression, it has taken its toll
I can finally stand up and walk away,
I overcame the pain of depression,
Broke the chain holding me here
I can finally let people near
Total control of my own life,
I have cried my last tear
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Comments: 5
arrow459 [2004-11-16 04:03:57 +0000 UTC]
very good... i have been there before. you have lots of passion in your writing.
----josh
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codebluessm [2004-06-03 02:42:16 +0000 UTC]
GREAT JOB! You finally have a masterpiece! Keep up the good work bud!
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causticgit [2004-06-03 01:16:50 +0000 UTC]
This should be a song... I know the experience intimately. You've done an awesome job expressing it. The editor in me would like to tighten up some lines, however. Your rhyme scheme isn't as consistent as it could be, and some lines are just too long for the rhythm you've established.
Also- that image is gorgeous. Drew me in. Where did you get it?
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ALkY215 In reply to causticgit [2004-06-03 01:19:34 +0000 UTC]
Thanks very much, i am glad you enjoyed it. The image I got from Google search, it caught my eye, so yeah, lol. thanks again bud!
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