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tell a lie
Published: 2013-04-16 20:13:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 3609; Favourites: 165; Downloads: 0
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i. rivers are stronger than oceans despite their size
they tumble through sharp mountains
but they never, ever stop
ii. i can rush and pick up sediments
and disperse them where i wish
iii. i'm lying -
i knew you saw it anyway,
there's seaweed in my fingernails
and salt on my breath
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This is wonderful. A subtle beauty really makes this piece stand out from the rest. Well done, hun.
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ah this poem is so amazing. i'm honestly speechless. i have nothing to say.
just, wow.
congratulations of the Daily Deviation. it is well deserved.
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I'm so sorry, but I may be on of the few people who does not fully understand this.
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don't be sorry haha, poetry isn't just expected to be understood, and sometimes it doesn't really have to be. but i suppose you're curious, so i'll explain it:
basically, stanza one is implying that rivers are stronger than oceans: although oceans are vast, they just stay still. sure, there are rough waves, but they are - essentially - just a pool of water.
rivers, however, never stop moving, they never stop flowing even though they get shoved over rocks and and pick up dirt and just have a hard time, really.
then, in stanza two, the character is metaphorically comparing themself to a river, saying that they are strong and even though horrible things get thrown at them, they just go with the flow and ride out with it and then eventually let go.
stanza three uses imagery that suggests the character is really an ocean.
the prompt of this piece was the title, tell a lie: this character is lying about their emotional strength and how much they can handle.
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Oh. Well now it all makes sense! No wonder you go a DD!
I thank you for explaining this. *bows*
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thank you, haha, and you are most welcome.
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I think I kind of do but I'm still confused xD
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I agree with you.. even the connection between all 3!
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This is beautiful! It makes me sad, and I'm not really sure why.
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Love it. It is beautiful. Truly. Congrats on the DD
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The last stanza is really just what makes this poem amazingly beautiful. 
What a well-deserved DD!
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You're welcome! You killed me...
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'i'm lying -
i knew you saw it anyway,
there's seaweed in my fingernails
and salt on my breath'
I have added this piece to my favourites, previously, but I never commented to tell you why. I absolutely love this part, it just jumps out at me. You did a wonderful job with the prompt, and the way you have written this piece, whilst it is short, is both captivating and incredible to read.
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thank you, my dear.
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