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Published: 2010-07-16 01:20:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 4679; Favourites: 92; Downloads: 30
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Constructive critique wanted. Go to town on my ass and tell me what you think in a way that will help me improve.I thought I would ruin it. But I guess not.
Seriously, did I ruin it now?
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This is digital. I took the drawing and made a layer over it and then deleted the drawing, leaving a completely digital drawing that I then colored.
A note to those not Familiar with General Grievous. His arms are cybernetic and his hands have two thumbs.
As I said in my Kummar Unmasked doo-hicky, I like the Idea that Kummar was actually kidnapped by the huk and sold into slavery and Grievous finds her during his time as a 'leg breaker'. It goes with what the TV series says, that he willingly changed his body. However, upon finding Kummar, he halts them and he only gets cybernetic limbs and implants in his brain and eyes.
He still becomes the Supreme Commander of the Droid Armies and the fabled Jedi killer. But he however now has a second in command with lig swords made of Phrik, a metal resistant to lightsabers.
And he like, doesn't die at Utapau because Obi-Wan is all 'Your not really evil, listen to the wild woman and leave', but Grievous is eventually found by Vader and they have an epic duel that goes on for ever and Vader gets fed up and cheats, crushing his legs and then stabbing him in the chest.
Thus ends the life of the great General Grievous.
He still has his dangly bits fyi. So Kummar is a happy woman.
And yeah. I gave Kummar boobs. So fucking sue me. I'm not the only one who does.
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The concept of a partial cybernetic Grievous is quite interesting indeed, as well as Ronderu continuing to live. Though I wonder if this would affect the existence of his other children.
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Thank you.
Can you explain to me what you mean about it affecting his children?
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Well canon states that he has 10 wives and 30 kids but none of them could fill the void Ronderu left in his heart. Would he even marry the other 10 wives if he had her? If he wouldn't then poor Qymaen II, he wouldn't exist D:
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This is after he left his family. He had no Idea she was still alive till he found her.
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Ah! Well Qymaen II would be overjoyed of his father's good fortune and to have him around for some time, until Vader finally ends Grievous' life and Qymean declares vendetta. Not one to trifle with lightly, like father like son.
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I suppose he would be glad.
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Thanks. What do you like about it?
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Nice cyborg details and the lightsaber.
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What's with the '...'?
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I'm pretty impressed with the possibilities...
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Ah, so you were trailing off in thought.
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Yeah... That's it.
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Thank you very much. ^^
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your welcome ^^
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well I already critiqued this In my other forum, but I focused on color. so I guess i will critique it on some other things, composition and line quality
composition
when beginning a drawing you need to think about the placement of your figures on the page, and keep it in mind wile working on it. Try to imagine the viewers eye moving around your final piece. you want to keep the viewers eye moving around the image with out leaving. The focal point Is the most interesting and dynamic part of the drawing, and then everything else supports the focal point. In this image your focal point is the female head and torso. Then the eye goes down in to her dress, and off the page, or follows her left sward in to blank space, or follows (i think its the other characters leg) and off the page.
this is mostly happening because of the placement of your figures. negative space (the space that isn't drawn on) can be a very powerful compositional tool..if you use it correctly. right now your figures are cropped off at the bottom, with all this unnecessary negative space around them.
another way to work with composition is to think of shapes, try to simplify your subject matter in to shapes on the page
this is a really good tutoral about composition by `fox-orian :thumb125042592:
line quality
one ting that is hurting this is line quality. The lines are jagged and messy, (that's not always a bad thing) but in this case it does not add to the image. Think about what you want to portray, in your case your figures are in kind of a fighting stance. so the lines should express stability, and aggressiveness. so the lines could be bold and some what ridged. (if you were drawing something happy like a mermaid you might want to use smooth organic lines) You can use line to define the mass and depth of your shapes by varying the with of the line. This is referred to as line weight. The lines should be the thickest where the light is not hitting, or where weight is distributed. (such as the females for arms on her skirt)
here is a tutorial about inking in photoshop by *celesse :thumb22103422:
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I'm not going to go to town on yer ass but the only thing I see that looks a little awkward is that Ronderu's hand (the one closest to Grievous) looks like it is resting on top of the handle of the lig sword instead of gripping it. I hate drawing hands. They are a big pet peeve of mine.
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Okay, thanks. I'll find out work on that.
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With the coloring. I have done so in the past.
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this time you did perfect
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XD Thank you very much.
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your welcome!
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Thanks. Should I put in a back ground? Like, blood splatter or something? XD
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definately!!!
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i never been that good enough to make digital painting.. but i know how to appreciate it.. and so i know how to say whats right and wrong..
i must say..you did well coloring it.. just first thing.. make the color smooth as much as you can..the same way how you make their faces smooth.. 2nd i notice the female left hand is not proportion.. the thumb should be located at the opposite side.. but i noticed her other hand have 4 fingers only and 2 is sort of a thumb.. then your left hand should have another thumb on the opposite side..(hope you get my point..) lastly..i saw your lineart and it was great but wen you color it you have to edit it a bit and make the outline more smoother.. but the colors are impressive
im not mean? em i? just keep doing artworks and you will improve more and more.. never stop learning..always expect more from yourself so you will give more of your best every time..
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Thank you very much for the feed back. I'll do my best to smooth everything out.
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This is a really intriguing piece. I loved reading the back story behind it in the lineart version. You did a great job coloring!!
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Thank you very much. ^^ Is there anything I can do to make it better perhaps?
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Grievious's left leg looks a bit wonky. As much as I love Star Wars, I'm unsure of how his leg is supposed to be so it may be fine for his character and I'm just not in the know XD
Based on the rest of the coloring, the girl's skirt's shading stands out a bit, as in it's different than how you colored and shaded the rest of the piece so it stands out more when I don't think it really should.
Dos that help? I'm rubbish at critiques, so sorry!
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Okay. I'll edit Kummar's skirt a bit. Thanks. You did a good job.
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Haha, you're welcome. I'm never quite sure what to say since sometime, it may just be the way I perceive the piece and I don't want to hurt people's feelings
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This is very interesting. The poses are unique, although a little distorted. Still very good, though.
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Thanks.
I'm a little confused as to what you mean by distorded. XD
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The poses are slightly awkward, that's all.
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Can you tell me where so I can do better next time? *is totally blind when seeing the problems, yet knows they are there regardless*
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Well, for the most part, it's just the male's left arm. It looks like it may be too low on his shoulder and it's bending in a way impossible for the arm to bend. I think it may look a little too long, too. Everything else looks fine, though.
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