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AuthenticLogic — Addicted to Tragedy
Published: 2006-07-20 03:05:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 98; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 5
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A flicker in the darkRaises a multitude of heads
And the darkness stretches onwards
Yet empty hope rises
As all begin to joy
Maybe the light will return
They ceaselessly dwell
Maybe, just once more
But alas, the hope was never full
Still always and all
They will never fail
Just fall with hope that was unfilled
They live life hoping
They live life seeking
They live life praying
They live life dwelling
They live life keeping
They live life dying
They are living dying
And yet, as before
They will still wait
For one more flicker of light
The one that all know
That shall never come
The one that they will die
Hoping for
Seeking for
Praying for
Dwelling for
Keeping for
Dying for
Will an undoable event lead to tragedy?
No, because
They will not focus on how to create
Just how to wish
How to wish that the light were there
Boy scouts they are not
But people, rather
People who, like all others
Are addicted to tragedy.
Comments: 6
I like the line about not being boy scouts, but rather people....I actually really like the idea of this poem, that human frailties are not as negative as others think...
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I like it quite a bit, good message. It didn't flow as well as some of your other peices, but I still liked it.
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It's very good. A couple of things i am nitpicking on though. fifth stanza last two verses
They live life hoping
They live life seeking
They live life praying
They live life dwelling
They live life keeping
They live life dying
They are living dying
the last two verses didn't seem to flow like the others did. i think it is because you use dying in both of them. instead of dying in the second to last verse use somethign like withering or fading or somethign like that.
Other than that i really enjoyed this poem. It speaks out and has emotion to it. If a sad feeling. Nicely written good job.
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Care to elaborate?
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It's just...different from a lot of stuff you see on here. But anyway, I really like some of the imagery and line structure, particularly near the beginning. I think the poem could really use some more punctuation, though, to give people an idea of how it's supposed to flow. I had some trouble with that. And there's some repetition of images, too.
I like it, though.
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